Bike— Part 1 採点レポート
会話
Part 1
試験官
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
受験者
I used to. I used to have a bike. Well, I don't if I'm not mistaken when I was just only four or five years old, my dad was the teacher of mine when teaching me how to use a bike just because I was brought a bike when I had a birthday and when I was
試験官
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
受験者
It depends a lot. Well, nowadays I don't think so, just because children nowadays they are more likely to use uh to use the social media. They exercise less, they jogging less, they use the bike less instead. They do prefer some more other leisure activities such as
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総合
Part 1
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
スコア: 40.0提案: Bạn trả lời đúng trọng tâm nhưng lặp “I used to”, có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và câu trả lời bị bỏ dở. Hãy dùng một câu mở đầu rõ ràng, sau đó nêu tuổi, ai dạy bạn đi xe và dịp bạn nhận được chiếc xe. Tránh các cụm không tự nhiên như “the teacher of mine” và “I was brought a bike”; có thể nói “my dad taught me” và “I got a bike for my birthday”.
例: Yes, I had a bike when I was about four or five. My dad taught me how to ride it after I got it for my birthday. I remember being a little nervous at first, but I soon got the hang of it.
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
スコア: 45.0提案: Bạn đã nêu quan điểm nhưng câu trả lời chưa hoàn chỉnh, có từ đệm và lặp từ (“nowadays”, “to use”). Một số cấu trúc cần sửa: dùng “children are” thay vì “children they are”, và “jog less” thay vì “jogging less”. Hãy nêu rõ xe đạp có phổ biến hay không, đưa ra một lý do cụ thể và hoàn tất ý bằng một ví dụ về hoạt động thay thế.
例: I don't think bikes are as popular as they used to be, especially among children. Many of them spend more time on social media or playing games, so they get less exercise and ride bikes less often. However, cycling is still popular with some people who use bikes for exercise or commuting.
文法
× Well, I don't if I'm not mistaken when I was just only four or five years old...
✓ Well, if I'm not mistaken, when I was just four or five years old...
The phrase I don't is incomplete because don't needs a verb, such as know or think. Here, removing this unfinished phrase makes the sentence grammatical. Avoid using just and only together because they are redundant.
× children nowadays they are more likely to use uh to use the social media.
✓ Children nowadays are more likely to use social media.
The subject children is already stated, so the pronoun they is unnecessary. Use one subject rather than repeating it.
× ...they are more likely to use the social media.
✓ ...they are more likely to use social media.
Social media is used here as a general, uncountable term, so it does not take the definite article the.
× They jogging less...
✓ They jog less...
The transcript describes habitual behavior, so use the present simple jog. The present continuous form jogging requires an auxiliary verb, are, and would not fit as well with the surrounding statements about general habits.
× They do prefer some more other leisure activities such as
✓ They prefer other leisure activities, such as
Some more other combines overlapping quantity words and is not grammatical in this context. Use other directly before the plural noun leisure activities. The phrase is also unfinished in the transcript, so the examples after such as are not included.
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