Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer directly, then give one clear supporting detail. Use “ride my bike to school” rather than “roll” or “school life scene,” and say “from Grade 1 until the end of high school.” Avoid fillers such as “uh” and “like.”

例: Yes, I did. I rode my bike to school from Grade 1 until I finished high school, so cycling was part of my daily routine.

提案: State your opinion clearly and distinguish between bicycles and motorbikes, since “bikes” can refer to either. Correct “everyone have” to “almost everyone has,” and replace “bites” and “buys” with the intended words. Support your answer with a specific observation, and reduce fillers and repetition.

例: Yes, they’re very popular in Vietnam, especially motorbikes. They’re a convenient way to get around, and you can see them on the roads in almost every city. Bicycles are also common among children and people who live close to work or school.

× I used to roll, uh, ride my bike to my school life scene.

✓ I used to ride my bike to school.

The phrase 'to my school life scene' does not use a grammatical or appropriate preposition pattern here. Say 'ride my bike to school.'

× I was like Grade 1 until the end of my high school.

✓ I rode my bike from Grade 1 until the end of high school.

To describe the period when you rode your bike, use 'from ... until ...'. The original wording also leaves the time relationship unclear; this correction makes it clear that you rode during those school years.

× Yeah, obviously, because I in Vietnam, my country is like, uh, the bites are very popular to anyone.

✓ Yeah, obviously. In Vietnam, bikes are very popular among people.

Use 'among people' to describe something that is popular within a group. 'Popular to anyone' is not the appropriate preposition pattern. The phrase 'I in Vietnam' is an incomplete false start and is omitted in the corrected version.

× Like almost everyone have uh, has a buys with a motorbike or bicycle.

✓ Almost everyone has a bike, either a motorbike or a bicycle.

The subject 'everyone' is grammatically singular, so it takes the singular verb 'has,' not 'have.' The correction also removes the false start and makes the examples of bikes clear.