Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答切题，也提供了自行车来自姐姐、自己骑了几年等具体信息。需要避免重复表达“小时候有一辆自行车”；“Yes, I had”后应补充宾语，或直接说“Yes, I did”；指代姐姐应使用“she”，而不是“he”。此外，“She has grown out of it”与过去的故事时态不一致，可改为“She had grown out of it”。用“So”连接姐姐把车给你的结果会更自然。

例: Yes, I did. It was actually my older sister’s bike, but she had grown out of it, so she handed it down to me. I rode it for several years.

提案: 你直接表达了观点，并给出公共交通便宜、快捷这一理由，但理由没有充分说明自行车是否受欢迎。可以补充自行车在城市通勤中不普及的具体原因，或说明它在某些人群中仍然常见。注意语法：主语“taking the subway or bus”应搭配“is”；“It don't”应改为“They don't”或“Public transport doesn't”；“have a traffic jam”不自然，可说“avoid traffic jams”。减少“uh”等填充词，并用“because”连接观点和理由。

例: No, I wouldn’t say bikes are very popular for commuting in my country. Many people prefer taking the subway or the bus because public transport is affordable and usually faster in busy cities. However, bikes are still popular for exercise and short trips.

× She has grown out of it.

✓ She had grown out of it.

这里是在讲过去发生的事情：姐姐先穿不下这辆自行车，之后才把它转交给学生。用过去完成时“had grown out of”可以清楚地表示这件事发生在“handed it down”之前。

× So he handed it down to me and I used it for several years.

✓ So she handed it down to me, and I used it for several years.

前文说明自行车属于姐姐，代词应使用“She”，不能使用“He”。指代人物时要确保代词的性别与前文一致。

× I think in my country, uh, take the subway and bus is so popular, uh, it's cheap and it's fast.

✓ I think taking the subway and bus is very popular in my country; it's cheap and fast.

“take the subway and bus”在句中作主语时，需要使用动名词形式“taking”。动词原形“take”不能直接充当这里的主语。

× It don't have a traffic jam with a lot of other things.

✓ It doesn't get stuck in traffic, among other things.

主语“It”是第三人称单数，因此否定句要用“doesn't”，不能用“don't”。“get stuck in traffic”也是表达“遇到交通拥堵”的自然说法。