Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer the question directly with yes or no, then add one brief detail, such as who bought the bike or where you rode it. Avoid pausing without giving a response.

例: Yes, I did. My parents bought me a small blue bike when I was about seven, and I used to ride it around our neighborhood.

提案: Give a clear answer and support it with one or two specific reasons. Use the plural form “bikes,” say “keep people fit,” and avoid restarting phrases or ending with an unfinished “because.” For example, mention commuting or exercise.

例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country. Many people ride them to work or school because they are affordable and convenient. They are also a good way to exercise and stay fit.

× Yes, I guess so because, uh, sometimes like it helps us, it helped to make a person happy or being fit during in a coup in a activity and there are a lot of country used, uh, that, uh, kind of thing because.

✓ Yes, I guess so, because bikes can make people happy and help them stay fit.

The answer discusses why bikes are generally popular, so the present-tense idea should be expressed consistently. Change it helped to a present-tense form such as they help. For general statements, keep the tense consistent unless you are describing a specific past event.

× Yes, I guess so because, uh, sometimes like it helps us, it helped to make a person happy or being fit during in a coup in a activity and there are a lot of country used, uh, that, uh, kind of thing because.

✓ Bikes can make people happy or help them stay fit during an activity.

Being fit does not fit the structure after make a person happy. Use parallel wording: make people happy or help them stay fit. When describing a benefit, practice keeping the verbs in a sentence parallel.

× Yes, I guess so because, uh, sometimes like it helps us, it helped to make a person happy or being fit during in a coup in a activity and there are a lot of country used, uh, that, uh, kind of thing because.

✓ Bikes can help people stay fit during an activity.

During already indicates when something happens, so it should not be followed by in here. Use during an activity, not during in an activity. Review whether a time preposition already expresses the relationship you intend.

× Yes, I guess so because, uh, sometimes like it helps us, it helped to make a person happy or being fit during in a coup in a activity and there are a lot of country used, uh, that, uh, kind of thing because.

✓ A lot of countries use bikes.

A lot of refers to more than one country, so the plural noun countries is required. Also, countries use bikes is the appropriate active construction. Remember to use plural nouns after expressions that indicate a large number.

× Yes, I guess so because, uh, sometimes like it helps us, it helped to make a person happy or being fit during in a coup in a activity and there are a lot of country used, uh, that, uh, kind of thing because.

✓ Bikes can help people stay fit during an activity.

Activity is a singular countable noun, and it begins with a vowel sound, so use an rather than a. Check both whether a singular countable noun needs an article and which form of the article its initial sound requires.

× Yes, I guess so because, uh, sometimes like it helps us, it helped to make a person happy or being fit during in a coup in a activity and there are a lot of country used, uh, that, uh, kind of thing because.

✓ Yes, I guess so. Bikes can make people happy and help them stay fit during an activity. A lot of countries use bikes.

The original response contains an unfinished ending with because and combines several ideas in a difficult-to-follow structure. End the explanation with a complete clause, and divide related ideas into clear sentences. The transcript phrase coup is unclear, so it has not been included in the correction.