Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: You answer the question directly and include a useful detail about the bike’s colours. Avoid restarting the sentence and use the past tense consistently because you are talking about your childhood. You could add one brief detail about how you used the bike.

例: Yes, I did. I had a black-and-red bike when I was a child, and I often rode it around my neighbourhood.

提案: Give a clear answer at the beginning, then support it with one specific reason or example. Avoid repeating “I think” and “popular,” and replace “youngers” with “young people.” Use a linking word such as “because” to connect your opinion to its reason.

例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among young people. They are an affordable way to get around, and many people use them for exercise or short trips.

× Yes, sure, I have a I had a black and red bike when I was a child.

✓ Yes, sure. I had a black and red bike when I was a child.

The answer refers to a childhood experience, so the past tense had is appropriate. The present-tense have is a false start and should be removed.

× I think that bikes are more popular in among uh, youngers than uh, adults.

✓ I think that bikes are more popular among young people than adults.

In and among should not be used together here. Use among to describe popularity within a group.

× I think that bikes are more popular in among uh, youngers than uh, adults.

✓ I think that bikes are more popular among young people than adults.

Youngers is not the standard noun for younger people. Use young people to refer to this group.

× So, so it can say that uh, bikes are popular in my country.

✓ So, it can be said that bikes are popular in my country.

The expression it can say uses an active verb with the impersonal subject it. Use the passive form it can be said, or say we can say.