Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 先直接回答是否有自行车，再说明父母买车但你没有学会骑车。注意使用过去时，例如“when I was a child”和“my parents bought it for me”；避免重复或不完整的表达，如“my the bike”和“but I even though”。

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My parents bought it for me, but I never learned how to ride it, so I mostly just watched other children cycling.

提案: 回答切题，也提到了共享单车，但“almost everyone in our school”重复出现，且“we have a clash”意思不清楚。建议用一句话概括自行车很受欢迎，再用共享单车普及或骑行方便等具体细节支撑，并使用“because”或“also”等连接词。

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. Many people ride them to school or work because they’re convenient and inexpensive. Shared bikes are also widely available in cities, so it’s easy to find one.

× Yes, I did have a bike when I'm tired, but I even though I have my the bike, which is bought from my parents, I still didn't learn how to ride a bike.

✓ Yes, I did have a bike when I was a child, but even though I had a bike, which was bought by my parents, I still didn't learn how to ride a bike.

题目询问的是童年经历，因此相关动词应使用过去时。这里用“was”代替“am”，用“had”代替“have”，并用“was bought”代替“is bought”，以保持时态与过去的语境一致。

× Yes, I did have a bike when I'm tired, but I even though I have my the bike, which is bought from my parents, I still didn't learn how to ride a bike.

✓ Yes, I did have a bike when I was a child, but even though I had a bike, which was bought by my parents, I still didn't learn how to ride a bike.

“but”和“even though”不能像原句那样连续使用来连接同一处转折。可以保留“but”，并将后面的“I”删掉，改为“but even though...”；也可以去掉“but”，单独使用“even though”。

× Yes, I did have a bike when I'm tired, but I even though I have my the bike, which is bought from my parents, I still didn't learn how to ride a bike.

✓ Yes, I did have a bike when I was a child, but even though I had my bike, which was bought by my parents, I still didn't learn how to ride a bike.

“my”是限定词，后面不能再加定冠词“the”。应说“my bike”，不能说“my the bike”。

× Yes, of course everyone in our school is riding, almost everyone in our school rides their bikes.

✓ Yes, of course, everyone in our school rides; almost everyone in our school rides their bikes.

这里是在描述学校里的普遍情况，而不是某人此刻正在骑车，因此更适合使用一般现在时“rides”，而不是现在进行时“is riding”。

× Yes, of course everyone in our school is riding, almost everyone in our school rides their bikes.

✓ Yes, of course, everyone in our school rides; almost everyone in our school rides their bikes.

原句用逗号直接连接两个可以独立成句的部分，形成逗号拼接错误。可用分号连接，也可以另起一句。