Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 질문에 직접 답한 점은 좋지만, 두 번째 부분의 표현이 불완전해 의미를 파악하기 어렵습니다. ‘about six or seven years old’는 ‘when I was about six or seven’으로 표현하고, 자전거의 특징과 나중에 어떻게 되었는지 완전한 문장으로 설명해 보세요. 문장 사이에 ‘At first’와 ‘Later’ 같은 연결 표현을 사용하면 답변이 더 자연스럽고 논리적입니다.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was about six or seven years old. It had three wheels, so it was easy to ride. Later, when I got older, I started riding a regular bike.

提案: 자전거가 인기 있는 이유를 설명하려는 점은 좋지만, ‘every commuter want’는 주어와 동사의 수가 일치하지 않고, ‘every most commuter use’는 불완전한 표현입니다. ‘commuters want’, ‘traffic jams’, ‘public transport’처럼 자연스러운 표현을 사용하고, 어떤 사람들이 자전거를 이용하는지 완전한 문장으로 마무리하세요. 답변을 짧게 유지하면서 이유와 결과를 ‘because’와 ‘so’로 연결해 보세요.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. Many commuters ride them because they want to avoid traffic jams and crowded public transport. As a result, cycling is a convenient way to get around, especially in busy cities.

× At that time I had a bike with. Three hill as time went on, I change my.

✓ At that time, I had a bike with three hills. As time went on, I changed my bike.

The preposition with is left without an object, and the following words do not form a complete sentence. Connect three hills to the phrase with, and include a noun after my to complete the final thought.

× At that time I had a bike with. Three hill as time went on, I change my.

✓ At that time, I had a bike with three hills. As time went on, I changed my bike.

The number three requires a plural count noun. Change hill to hills.

× At that time I had a bike with. Three hill as time went on, I change my.

✓ At that time, I had a bike with three hills. As time went on, I changed my bike.

The answer describes events in the past, so change should be in the past tense: changed.

× Yes, it's really popular in my country because every commuter want to avoid traffic jam and complex trans public transport.

✓ Yes, bikes are really popular in my country because every commuter wants to avoid traffic jams and complex public transport.

The subject is plural bikes, so the pronoun it is not appropriate. Use bikes or they to refer to the plural noun.

× Yes, it's really popular in my country because every commuter want to avoid traffic jam and complex trans public transport.

✓ Yes, bikes are really popular in my country because every commuter wants to avoid traffic jams and complex public transport.

Every commuter is grammatically singular, so its verb must be wants, not want.

× Yes, it's really popular in my country because every commuter want to avoid traffic jam and complex trans public transport. So every most commuter use.

✓ Yes, bikes are really popular in my country because every commuter wants to avoid traffic jams and complex public transport. So most commuters use them.

Use the plural form commuters with most. Traffic jams is also the natural plural form when referring generally to traffic congestion in multiple instances.

× So every most commuter use.

✓ So most commuters use them.

Every and most cannot be combined before the same noun in this way. Use most commuters to refer to the majority of commuters.

× So every most commuter use.

✓ So most commuters use them.

The sentence is incomplete because use needs an object here. Add them to indicate what the commuters use.