Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 先直接回答是否有自行车，并修正关键词和语法：应说“bike”，不是“back”；“started to how to ride”应改为“learned how to ride”；描述过去经历时用过去时，例如“fell off my bike”。可以保留摔倒的细节，但表达要简洁、自然。

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was ten. It was the first bike I learned to ride, and I still remember falling off it on my first day. Luckily, I wasn’t badly hurt.

提案: 开头直接回答问题，并注意关键词应为“bikes”或“shared bikes”，不是“bags”或“banks”。举例时可说“cities such as Beijing and Shanghai”，避免“for example”和“like”重复使用；将“employees”换成更准确的“commuters”或“people”，并具体说明共享单车方便在哪里。

例: Yes, bikes, especially shared bikes, are very popular in my country. In cities such as Beijing and Shanghai, you can find them all over the streets. They’re convenient for commuters because people can use them for short trips or to get to a subway station.

× I remembered it was the first time when I started to how to ride a bike and I still remember the scene when I fell down from the back.

✓ I remember it was the first time I learned how to ride a bike, and I still remember the scene when I fell down from the back.

“started to how to ride”结构错误：to 后面应接动词原形，不能直接接 how to 引导的结构。可以说“started to learn how to ride”，也可以简洁地说“learned how to ride”。另外，前面说“I still remember”，表示现在仍然记得，因此用“I remember”比“I remembered”更符合上下文。

× For example, like in Beijing, Shanghai or some other cities, there are many banks shared bags around the city because it's very convenient for the employees.

✓ For example, in Beijing, Shanghai, and some other cities, there are many banks shared bags around the city because it's very convenient for the employees.

“For example”和“like”在这里都用于引出例子，重复使用显得句子结构冗余。保留“For example”即可，后面直接接地点。