Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 先直接回答是否有自行车，再补充原因和出行方式。注意语法：应说“when I was a child”和“in the countryside”；讲过去的习惯时用过去时，例如“walked”，并用“walked everywhere”表达“到处步行”。删去重复的“I didn't have a bike”和过多填充词，句子之间加上连接词。

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child because I lived in the countryside. I usually walked wherever I needed to go, as most places were within walking distance.

提案: 回答切题，也举出了城市和公共自行车的例子。可以减少“um”和“you know”等填充词，并注意复数表达：“in big cities like Shanghai and Beijing”。再补充一个具体用途或原因，让回答更充分、自然。

例: Yes, definitely. Bikes are popular in big cities like Shanghai and Beijing, where public bikes are easy to find. Many people use them for short trips because they’re convenient and help them avoid traffic.

× When I was child, um, you know, I didn't have a bike because I lived in a countryside, so um, I definitely didn't have a bike I just take a walk get to anywhere

✓ When I was a child, um, you know, I didn't have a bike because I lived in the countryside, so, um, I definitely didn't have a bike; I just walked wherever I needed to go.

“child”是可数名词单数，前面需要不定冠词“a”，所以应说“a child”。

× When I was child, um, you know, I didn't have a bike because I lived in a countryside, so um, I definitely didn't have a bike I just take a walk get to anywhere

✓ When I was a child, um, you know, I didn't have a bike because I lived in the countryside, so, um, I definitely didn't have a bike; I just walked wherever I needed to go.

表示“乡下、农村”时，通常使用固定表达“the countryside”，不说“a countryside”。

× When I was child, um, you know, I didn't have a bike because I lived in a countryside, so um, I definitely didn't have a bike I just take a walk get to anywhere

✓ When I was a child, um, you know, I didn't have a bike because I lived in the countryside, so, um, I definitely didn't have a bike; I just walked wherever I needed to go.

这段话讲的是小时候的经历，时态应保持过去时。“take”应改为过去式“took”；改写为“walked”也使用了过去时。

× When I was child, um, you know, I didn't have a bike because I lived in a countryside, so um, I definitely didn't have a bike I just take a walk get to anywhere

✓ When I was a child, um, you know, I didn't have a bike because I lived in the countryside, so, um, I definitely didn't have a bike; I just walked wherever I needed to go.

“I definitely didn't have a bike”和“I just...”是两个完整分句，不能直接连在一起；应使用分号、句号或适当的连词。“get to anywhere”结构不自然，可改为“wherever I needed to go”（我需要去的任何地方）。

× Yeah, definitely, especially, um, you know, um uh in the big city like Shanghai Beijing, there are many public bikes for people.

✓ Yeah, definitely. Especially in big cities like Shanghai and Beijing, there are many public bikes for people.

这里举例的是上海和北京两个城市，因此应使用复数“cities”，而不是单数“city”。

× Yeah, definitely, especially, um, you know, um uh in the big city like Shanghai Beijing, there are many public bikes for people.

✓ Yeah, definitely. Especially in big cities like Shanghai and Beijing, there are many public bikes for people.

并列提到上海和北京时，需要用连词“and”连接，写作“Shanghai and Beijing”，不能直接把两个地名并列。