Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 先直接回答“小时候有一辆自行车”，并使用过去时，例如“I had”。接着说明是谁送的、是什么时候送的，再补充一两个具体外观细节。注意语法：用“my mum bought it for me”，避免重复使用“bike”和“very”，并尽量让表达自然简洁。

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My mum bought it for my birthday, and it was white with a cute little basket at the front.

提案: 先明确回答自行车在你们国家是否流行，然后说明人们骑车通勤或上学的原因，并用一个具体观察作补充。修正“because my country”等不自然表达，可说“in my country”；避免重复“to”和“very”。最后一句目前没有说完整，应补充清楚早上能看到什么。

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. Many people ride them to work or school because they are an affordable and convenient way to get around. In the morning, you can see lots of cyclists on the roads.

× I have a bike when I was child

✓ I had a bike when I was a child

这句话描述的是童年时的情况，应使用一般过去时：have 的过去式是 had。讲述过去发生或存在的事情时，注意让动词时态与 when I was a child 保持一致。

× when I was child

✓ when I was a child

child 是可数名词单数，前面通常需要冠词。这里应使用不定冠词 a，表示“一个孩子”。

× this bike is my mom buy it for me

✓ my mom bought this bike for me

这件事发生在过去，buy 应改为过去式 bought。另外，my mom 后面直接接 bought 即可，不需要再加 is。描述过去发生的动作时，应使用一般过去时。

× it's my birthday present

✓ it was my birthday present

这里是在回忆童年时收到的礼物，应使用过去时 was，而不是现在时 is。

× the bike is all white and is very very cute

✓ the bike was all white and very, very cute

这句话描述的是小时候那辆自行车的样子，应将 is 改为过去式 was。并列结构中后半部分的主语与前面相同，可以省略重复的主语和 be 动词。

× Yes, it's very popular

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular

问题询问的是复数 bikes 是否受欢迎，因此回答时应使用复数主语 bikes 和对应的 are，不能用单数代词 it。

× because my country some people would like to ride a bike to go to to work

✓ because in my country some people would like to ride a bike to work

表示“在我的国家”时，应在 my country 前加介词 in。此外，go to to work 中的 to 重复了；可以说 go to work 或 ride a bike to work。

× Yes, it's very popular and because my country some people would like to ride a bike

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular because in my country some people ride bikes

and 和 because 在原句中的连接方式不恰当，导致句子衔接混乱。可以直接用 because 引出受欢迎的原因，并把原因放在同一个完整句子中。

× and if you are in the morning and you will see very, very

✓ If you go out in the morning, you will see many people riding bikes.

原句中 if you are in the morning 表达不完整，且 you will see 后缺少宾语，very, very 也没有修饰对象，因此句子没有完整表达。可以改为 If you go out in the morning, you will see many people riding bikes，补全条件、主句和宾语。