Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer the question directly, then finish your supporting detail in a complete sentence. Use “younger brother” rather than “small brother,” and use plural forms such as “potatoes” and “candies.” Avoid starting a final clause with “and” unless you complete the thought. For example, explain what you did with the bike or how you felt about riding it.

例: To be honest, I didn’t have a bike of my own as a child, but I often borrowed my younger brother’s. I rode it around our village, especially when my grandmother asked me to go to the shop for groceries. I enjoyed those little trips because they gave me a chance to ride.

提案: This response does not answer whether bikes are popular; it appears to be feedback about an answer rather than your spoken response. Give a clear opinion first, then add a relevant reason and, if possible, a specific example. Keep it to two or three complete sentences.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, particularly in cities where people use them for short trips. They’re an affordable way to get around and don’t use petrol, so many people see them as an environmentally friendly option.

× However, my small brother's bike was available for me and I usually used it in the village.

✓ However, my younger brother's bike was available to me, and I usually used it in the village.

Small usually describes size, not the age relationship between siblings. Use younger brother or little brother to mean a brother who is younger than you.

× However, my small brother's bike was available for me and I usually used it in the village.

✓ However, my younger brother's bike was available to me, and I usually used it in the village.

The usual preposition with available when referring to something someone can use or access is to, as in available to me.

× When my granny asked me to go to the shop to buy some eggs or some potato or probably candies and that's

✓ When my granny asked me to go to the shop to buy some eggs, potatoes, or perhaps candy, I usually took the bike.

Potato is a countable noun, so it should be plural after some when referring to an unspecified amount. Use potatoes. The correction also completes the unfinished thought in the past-tense context.

× When my granny asked me to go to the shop to buy some eggs or some potato or probably candies and that's

✓ When my granny asked me to go to the shop to buy some eggs, potatoes, or perhaps candy, I usually took the bike.

The sentence begins with a dependent when-clause but does not complete the main clause; and that's leaves the thought unfinished. Add a complete main clause, such as I usually took the bike, to make the sentence complete.