Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 先直接回答问题，再补充一两个具体细节。注意时态：讲童年经历时用过去时，例如用“had”或“was”。“the blanket with the butterflies”表达不清晰，如果你指的是带蝴蝶图案的车座套，可以说“a seat cover with a butterfly pattern”；“the city is very comfortable”也不自然，可以改成“the bike was comfortable to ride”。避免用未完成的“I wish”结尾。

例: Yes, I did. I had a pink bike with a butterfly-patterned seat cover, and it was very comfortable to ride. I used to ride it around my neighborhood after school.

提案: 回答时先明确表明自行车是否受欢迎，再用一个具体例子支持观点。注意“in my country”和“in Baltimore”之间的关系；如果巴尔的摩是你想举的例子，可以用“In Baltimore, for example”引出。“They can a football and a size ball”语法和含义不清楚，建议说明人们如何使用共享单车，例如通勤或在市区出行。可使用“because”“for example”等连接词让表达更连贯。

例: Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country. In Baltimore, for example, shared bikes are easy to find. Many people use them to commute or get around the city.

× The bike has the blanket with the butterflies.

✓ The bike had a blanket with butterflies.

这段话是在描述童年时的自行车，因此应使用过去时 had，而不是现在时 has。另外，首次提到一条毯子时通常用不定冠词 a；with butterflies 表示毯子上有蝴蝶图案。

× They can a football and a size ball for people to work.

✓ People can use them to get to work.

情态动词 can 后面需要接动词原形，不能直接接名词 a football。结合上下文，这里可表达为“人们可以使用共享单车去上班”，因此用 can use。原句中 football 和 size ball 的含义不清，建议确认原意后再补充相关信息。