Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Начните с прямого ответа и объясните причину более естественно: используйте «I didn’t have a bike» и «my mother couldn’t afford one». Избегайте повторения «buy buy» и неестественного выражения «walk around on my feet». Если вы имеете в виду езду на велосипеде, замените «writing» на «riding». Добавьте конкретную деталь, например, как вы добирались до школы или куда обычно ходили пешком.

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child because my mother couldn’t afford one. I usually walked to school and to nearby places instead. I sometimes wished I had a bike, but walking was just part of my daily routine.

提案: Сформулируйте мнение прямо и избегайте противоречия между популярностью велосипедов в Европе и ситуацией в России. Исправьте грамматику: «Russia is considered»; также вместо абсолютного утверждения «it’s not possible to ride a bike anywhere» укажите конкретную причину или ограничение, например нехватку велодорожек в некоторых городах. Разделите длинную фразу на несколько предложений и используйте связки, например «although» и «for example».

例: Bikes aren’t very popular in Russia, although their use may be growing in some cities. Many people prefer walking or driving, partly because there aren’t enough safe bike lanes in some areas. However, I think cycling could become more common in the future as cities improve their infrastructure.

× No, I didn't have the bike when I was a child because I used to walk around on my feet and I wasn't able to buy buy because my mother couldn't afford it.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because I used to walk around on my feet and I wasn't able to buy one because my mother couldn't afford it.

Use the indefinite article a when referring to a bike for the first time or to bikes in general. The also makes the bike sound like a specific bike already mentioned. After buy, use one to avoid repeating the noun bike.

× I think that bikes are not popular in my country because it is quite widespread in Europe, but Russia is consider considered to be the country for walkers, not drivers or cyclists so I think it could change in the future but now it's not possible to ride a bike anywhere.

✓ I think that bikes are not popular in my country because they are quite widespread in Europe, but Russia is considered to be a country for walkers, not drivers or cyclists, so I think this could change in the future, but now it's not possible to ride a bike anywhere.

The passive construction requires be followed by a past participle: is considered, not is consider. Also, bikes is plural, so use they are rather than it is when referring to bikes. Use a country when introducing Russia as one example of a country with this characteristic.