Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer directly, then add one or two specific details. Avoid repeated words and fillers such as “em” and “a a,” and use “my brother, our friends, and I” rather than “me and my brother and our friends.” Finish your thought instead of trailing off; if you are unsure about the bike’s color, say so briefly.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was in elementary school. I can't remember whether it was pink or purple, but I often rode it around our small village with my brother and friends. Those rides were a lot of fun.

提案: Give a clear answer and explain the weather issue using natural phrasing. Replace “the weather doesn't really help” with “the weather isn't ideal for cycling,” and say “at night” rather than “in the night.” Complete your final idea, and add a specific alternative or qualification if relevant.

例: No, I wouldn't say bikes are very popular in my country. The weather isn't ideal for cycling because it can be extremely hot during the day and very humid at night. As a result, many people prefer to travel by car or public transport.

× But me and my brother and our friends used to play and ride around our small village together and play and have fun.

✓ But my brother, our friends, and I used to ride around our small village together, play, and have fun.

Use the subject pronoun I, rather than the object pronoun me, as part of the subject of the sentence. In a coordinated subject, I comes before the verb. List the people together clearly, and avoid repeating play unnecessarily.

× It's also very humid in the night.

✓ It's also very humid at night.

Use at night for a general time of day. In the night is usually used to refer to a particular night or an event occurring during it.