Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer directly, then describe the bike in one clear sentence. Avoid fillers and repeated phrases, and use the natural expression “a Tom and Jerry design.” Add a specific detail about why you liked it.

例: Yes, I did. My parents bought me a bicycle with a Tom and Jerry design, which was my favorite cartoon at the time. I loved riding it around my neighborhood after school.

提案: Give a clear opinion about bike use in your own country instead of shifting to other countries. Support your answer with a specific reason or example, and avoid uncertain phrases such as “maybe” and “not sure.”

例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in cities. They are an affordable way to get around, and they’re convenient for short trips when traffic is heavy.

× My parents bought me um bicycle, which was designed uh which had which had a design of a tom and Jerry and I that was my favorite.

✓ My parents bought me a bicycle with a Tom and Jerry design, and it was my favorite.

The singular countable noun bicycle needs the indefinite article a when it is mentioned for the first time. Use a before a consonant sound.

× My parents bought me um bicycle, which was designed uh which had which had a design of a tom and Jerry and I that was my favorite.

✓ My parents bought me a bicycle with a Tom and Jerry design, and it was my favorite.

The pronoun I refers to the speaker, but the bicycle is the thing that was the speaker's favorite. Use it as the subject pronoun referring to the bicycle.

× Yes, I think so, but not sure about maybe many other countries people get bicycles more and more such as um for example in Netherland or yeah maybe Netherland

✓ Yes, I think so, but I'm not sure. People in many other countries may be using bicycles more and more, for example, in the Netherlands.

The phrase but not sure is missing a subject and the linking verb. Use I'm not sure to form a complete clause.

× Yes, I think so, but not sure about maybe many other countries people get bicycles more and more such as um for example in Netherland or yeah maybe Netherland

✓ Yes, I think so, but I'm not sure. People in many other countries may be using bicycles more and more, for example, in the Netherlands.

The phrase many other countries people puts the place phrase in an unnatural position. Put the subject people first, then place the prepositional phrase in many other countries. This creates a clear sentence structure.

× Yes, I think so, but not sure about maybe many other countries people get bicycles more and more such as um for example in Netherland or yeah maybe Netherland

✓ Yes, I think so, but I'm not sure. People in many other countries may be using bicycles more and more, for example, in the Netherlands.

The conventional English name is the Netherlands, so it takes the definite article the. Use the full country name rather than Netherland.