Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer directly, then explain when and where you rode the bike. Keep the verb tenses consistent when talking about childhood: use “had,” “kept,” and “rode.” Replace “run away” with a clear expression such as “ride around.” Avoid repeated phrases and fillers, and use natural wording such as “kept it in a shed in the backyard.”

例: Yes, I did. I had an electric bike, and I kept it in a shed in our backyard. Whenever the weather was nice, I would take it out and ride around my neighborhood.

提案: Make your main opinion clear, then support it with a concise comparison between large cities and small towns. Use “bicycles” or “bikes” consistently, and replace unclear wording such as “a mono” with the vehicle you mean. Check subject–verb agreement (“everyone has”) and use “bike lanes” when speaking generally.

例: I don’t think bikes are very popular where I live in the United States, especially in smaller towns, because most people rely on cars. However, cycling is more common in large cities like New York, where there are more bike lanes and people can get around more easily by bike.

× When I was a child like um my I have a e-bike and I put in a storage in the backyard.

✓ When I was a child, I had an e-bike and kept it in a storage area in the backyard.

The speaker is describing a situation from childhood, so the verbs should be in the past tense. Use had instead of have. Kept is a natural past-tense verb for describing where the bike was stored.

× a e-bike

✓ an e-bike

Use an before a word that begins with a vowel sound. E-bike begins with the vowel sound /iː/.

× in a storage in the backyard

✓ in a storage area in the backyard

Storage is generally an uncountable noun, so a storage is not natural when referring to a place for keeping things. Use a countable noun such as storage area or storage shed after a.

× When I want when it's like I wanted to take the bike or it's like a good weather that day I'm just taking it from the storage and just bring it outside to run away or something like that.

✓ When I wanted to take the bike and the weather was good, I took it out of storage and brought it outside.

The speaker is describing a past habit, so the verbs should be consistently in the past tense: wanted, was, took, and brought. Avoid switching to the present tense with want, am taking, and bring.

× a good weather

✓ good weather

Weather is an uncountable noun in this meaning, so it does not take the indefinite article a.

× everyone has have a have a vehicle

✓ everyone has a vehicle

Everyone is grammatically singular, so it takes the singular verb has. The repeated forms have and a are also unnecessary; use the concise phrase everyone has a vehicle.

× for the bikeike it's only suitable for some specific city which is like New York City or like Big City 'cause they have the bike lane

✓ Bikes are only suitable for certain cities, such as New York City or other big cities, because they have bike lanes.

The speaker is referring to multiple cities, so use the plural cities rather than city. The general reference to lanes also calls for the plural bike lanes.