Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer responds directly and gives a clear reason. To make it sound more conversational, use the contraction “didn’t” and add a brief detail, such as how you felt about not having a bike.

例: No, I didn’t have a bike as a child because my mother didn’t want me to ride one. I was a little disappointed, since some of my friends rode bikes after school.

提案: You give several relevant reasons, but the answer is difficult to follow because the ideas run together. Say “one of the most affordable and convenient forms of transport,” remove the incorrect phrase “play to for,” and group your reasons using a linking word such as “also.”

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because they’re an affordable and convenient form of transport. They’re also useful for recreation and can help people avoid traffic. Some people choose them because they’re a more environmentally friendly option.

× I think bikes are quite popular in my country because it is one of the most affordable and convenient way of transportation and we use it to play to for recreation purposes and to avoid traffic and to be sustainable as well.

✓ I think bikes are quite popular in my country because they are one of the most affordable and convenient ways of getting around. We use them for recreation and to avoid traffic, and they are sustainable as well.

The phrase one of the most is followed by a plural noun, so way should be ways. Use ways of getting around for a natural expression.

× I think bikes are quite popular in my country because it is one of the most affordable and convenient way of transportation and we use it to play to for recreation purposes and to avoid traffic and to be sustainable as well.

✓ I think bikes are quite popular in my country because they are one of the most affordable and convenient ways of getting around. We use them for recreation and to avoid traffic, and they are sustainable as well.

Bikes is plural, so the pronouns referring to bikes should also be plural: they and them, not it.

× I think bikes are quite popular in my country because it is one of the most affordable and convenient way of transportation and we use it to play to for recreation purposes and to avoid traffic and to be sustainable as well.

✓ I think bikes are quite popular in my country because they are one of the most affordable and convenient ways of getting around. We use them for recreation and to avoid traffic, and they are sustainable as well.

The sequence to play to for is not grammatically structured. Remove the unnecessary words and use them for recreation. Splitting the long sentence also makes the ideas clearer.