Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer the question directly, then complete your thought with a relevant detail. Correct “bite” to “bike,” and avoid fillers such as “um.” Your answer is unfinished, so explain what you did with the bike or why you had it. Use no more than a few clear sentences.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was in middle school. I used it to ride around my neighborhood and visit my friends.

提案: Give a clear answer and support it with one or two complete, specific points. Correct “buys” to “bikes,” and use natural phrasing such as “children often use bikes to get to school.” Avoid the unclear phrase “a tool of playing entertainment,” and finish your contrast about who rides bikes in the countryside. Use a linking word such as “also” or “while.”

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. In cities, children often ride them to school or for fun, while people in rural areas use them for short trips and daily errands.

× In the city center, children are often used buys to go to schools or as a tool of playing entertainment.

✓ In the city center, children often use bikes to go to school or for entertainment.

The original uses a passive construction, are often used, which makes it sound as if someone uses the children. The children are the people doing the action, so use the active form often use. In the sense of attending school, go to school is the natural expression. For entertainment is also a more appropriate phrase here.

× In the country, not only children is buys ...

✓ In the countryside, not only children use bikes ...

Children is plural, so it cannot agree with the singular verb is. Use a plural verb, such as use. The transcript ends mid-sentence, so this correction only repairs the grammar in the available portion.