Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer directly and add a specific detail about the bike or how you used it. Use the past tense consistently: change “I love it so much” to “I loved it very much.” “Beautiful” is understandable, but a more precise description such as its colour or style would make your answer more vivid. Avoid repeating “bike” by using “it.”

例: Yes, I had a lovely blue bike when I was seven. My father gave it to me as a birthday present, and I loved it. I rode it around our neighbourhood most evenings after school.

提案: Give a clear opening answer, such as “Yes, they’re quite popular,” then explain why. Correct the main grammar and word-choice issues: say “the majority of children,” “ride their bikes to school,” “motorbikes or cars,” and “bike lanes” or “roads designed for cyclists.” Remove fillers and the unclear phrase “the thing is because”; connect your reasons with “because” or “also.”

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among schoolchildren. Many children ride their bikes to school because it’s convenient and relatively safe. There isn’t much traffic in some areas, and many roads have bike lanes.

× It was a gift from my father, and I love it so much.

✓ It was a gift from my father, and I loved it so much.

The sentence describes the student's feelings about a bike they had as a child, so the past tense loved matches the past-time context. Use the present tense only if you mean that you still love the bike now.

× Of course, majority children in my country ride back to school.

✓ Of course, the majority of children in my country ride back to school.

The expression is the majority of + noun phrase. Add the before majority and of before children.

× Um, the thing is because it's also really easy for and safe for children to ride along on the road.

✓ Um, the thing is, it's also really easy and safe for children to ride on the road.

The thing is already introduces the point, so because is unnecessary here. Also, easy and safe are coordinated adjectives, so for should not be repeated between them. Use easy and safe for children to ride on the road.

× We don't have a lot of motorbike or car.

✓ We don't have a lot of motorbikes or cars.

Motorbike and car are countable nouns. After a lot of in this sentence, use their plural forms: motorbikes and cars.