Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 先直接回答，再补充一两个具体细节。注意时态和词形：说过去的事情用“when I was about seven”“rode”；“ride bicycle”应改为“small bicycle”，如果想描述颜色，请使用具体颜色词。最后一句没有说完，建议补充你通常骑车的地点或原因。

例: Yes, I had a small bicycle when I was a child. My parents bought it for me when I was about seven, and I often rode it along the paths near my home.

提案: 回答观点后，用一个具体现象或原因支持观点即可。避免重复表达，例如“service services”和“in the street on the street”；“扫二维码租车”可以说“scan a QR code to rent a bike”。注意补全句子，并使用连接词让回答更连贯。

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in large cities. Shared bikes are easy to find on the streets, and people can scan a QR code with their phones to rent one. They’re convenient for short trips.

× When I was a child, it was a small and ride bicycle my parents bought for me when I about seven.

✓ When I was a child, it was a small bicycle my parents bought for me when I was about seven.

描述过去的年龄时，应该使用过去式was。原句“when I about seven”缺少谓语动词，应改为“when I was about seven”。另外，“ride”不能在这里与形容词“small”并列修饰“bicycle”，因此删去这个不合适的词。

× I often roaded besides

✓ I often rode it.

“ride”的过去式是不规则变化“rode”，不是“roaded”。这里用“it”指代前文的自行车，使句子完整。

× You can see many shared bike service services in the street on the street.

✓ You can see many shared bike services on the street.

“many”后面应接可数名词复数。“service services”重复且形式不正确，应改为“services”。

× You can see many shared bike service services in the street on the street.

✓ You can see many shared bike services on the street.

表示街道上的位置时，“on the street”是自然的表达。原句重复使用了“in the street”和“on the street”，保留一个即可。

× People can use their phones, can the QR code to rent

✓ People can use their phones to scan the QR code to rent a bike.

原句中“can”重复，且“can the QR code”缺少合适的动词。表达用手机扫码时，应使用“scan the QR code”；“use their phones to scan...”结构清晰、语法完整。