Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Soruyu doğrudan yanıtlıyorsunuz; ancak “ch bike” ifadesi anlaşılmıyor ve “it wasn't until when” ile “kind of developed as a kid” doğal değil. Bisiklete kaç yaşınızda sahip olduğunuzu ve ne zaman binmeyi öğrendiğinizi net biçimde ayırın. Dolgu sözcüklerini azaltın ve yanıtı kısa, doğal cümlelerle kurun.

例: Yes, I did. I got my first bike when I was about eleven, so I learned to ride it a little later than some of my friends. I still remember how excited I was when I could finally ride on my own.

提案: Görüşünüzü açıkça belirtiyor ve Amsterdam ile Türkiye arasında karşılaştırma yapıyorsunuz. Ancak “I went ... and I see” zaman uyumu açısından tutarsız; geçmişteki deneyiminiz için “saw” kullanın. “Go to their works” ve “go to their houses” yerine daha doğal ifadeler seçin; örneğin “commute to work” ve “get around”. Türkiye'deki durumu açıklarken bisiklet yollarının azlığı gibi somut bir neden ekleyebilirsiniz.

例: No, I don't think bikes are very popular in Turkey. When I visited Amsterdam, I saw people cycling to work, school, and other places every day. In Turkey, cycling is less common, partly because many cities don't have enough bike lanes.

× Uh, yes, I did have a ch bike when I was a child, but it wasn't until when I was eleven or twelve, so I didn't learn how to ride a bike when I was so young.

✓ Uh, yes, I did have a bike when I was a child, but I didn't get one until I was eleven or twelve, so I didn't learn how to ride until then.

The phrase it wasn't until when is not grammatically correct. Use until directly before the time clause, or restructure the sentence as I didn't get one until I was eleven or twelve. The correction also removes ch, which appears to be a transcription error rather than a grammatical form.

× I don't think bikes are popular in our country. Uh, it's because I went to Amsterdam and I see a lot of people riding bikes to go to their houses, go to their works, go to their schools, but in Turkey, where I live, there's no such culture.

✓ I don't think bikes are popular in our country. It's because I went to Amsterdam and saw a lot of people riding bikes to go to their homes, to work, and to school, but in Turkey, where I live, there's no such culture.

The speaker describes a visit to Amsterdam in the past, so see should be in the past tense: saw. In this context, work and school are normally used without plural endings when referring to people's destinations.