Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer directly, then add one or two specific details. Avoid restarting the sentence and reduce fillers such as “uh” and “umm.” Use “after school,” not “after my school,” and make the memory clearer by explaining what you did with your siblings. Avoid repeating that it was a happy or memorable time.

例: Yes, I had a red bike when I was about nine. I often rode it with my siblings after school, usually around our neighborhood. It was one of my favorite parts of childhood.

提案: Clarify whether you mean bicycles or motorbikes, since “bikes” can refer to either. State your main point directly, then explain the lack of bicycle lanes and contrast this with motorbikes. Avoid the awkward phrase “they are we do not have” and use “commute by motorbike” rather than “faster to commute.” Replace “Hakka” with the correct place name if it is a transcription error.

例: Bicycles are not very popular in my country, although motorbikes are common. There are few dedicated bike lanes, so cycling to work or school can feel unsafe. Many people prefer motorbikes because they are faster and more convenient for commuting.

× It's because, um, if I am talking about bicycles, they are we do not have a specific lane for bicycles, so it's not safe to ride on them on your way to work, on your way to school.

✓ It's because, um, if I am talking about bicycles, we do not have specific lanes for them, so it's not safe to ride them on your way to work or school.

The phrase they are is incorrectly inserted before we do not have, creating a broken sentence structure. Remove they are and connect the subject and verb directly: we do not have. Use them to avoid repeating bicycles.