Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer in the past tense because the question asks about your childhood: use “I had” and “I liked.” Join the description and your opinion with a linking word such as “and.” The phrase “it also have a Valerie” is unclear, so use a specific feature you can name, or leave it out. Check subject–verb agreement and punctuation.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a small blue one that my father bought for me, and I loved its bright colour. I rode it around our neighbourhood whenever I had free time.

提案: Make the main point clear and use the plural “bikes” when speaking generally. Correct “everyone cups of tea” to “everyone’s cup of tea” and “are enjoy” to “enjoy.” Avoid the sentence fragment “but many of us. Does not have bike”; connect the contrast in one complete sentence. Add a specific reason or example if you can.

例: I don’t think bikes are very popular in my country. Cycling isn’t everyone’s cup of tea, and many people don’t own a bike. However, you can still see people cycling for exercise in some parks.

× Yes I do have a bike.

✓ Yes, I did have a bike.

The question asks about a past time, when you were a child, so the answer should use the past-tense auxiliary did rather than the present-tense do. Use did have to describe having the bike in the past.

× The bike was very beautiful, I like the shade of blue it was in and it also have a Valerie.

✓ The bike was very beautiful. I liked the shade of blue it was, and it also had a Valerie.

The speaker is describing a bike from childhood, so the verbs should remain in the past tense. Change like to liked and have to had. The word Valerie has been left unchanged because its intended meaning is unclear.

× The bike was very beautiful, I like the shade of blue it was in and it also have a Valerie.

✓ The bike was very beautiful. I liked the shade of blue it was, and it also had a Valerie.

The original joins two complete clauses with only a comma, creating a comma splice. Separate them with a period or join them with a suitable conjunction.

× Bike is not really everyone cups of tea in my country.

✓ Bikes are not really everyone's cup of tea in my country.

When speaking generally about bicycles, use the plural noun bikes. The plural subject also requires are. The expression is everyone's cup of tea, not everyone cups of tea.

× Bike is not really everyone cups of tea in my country.

✓ Bikes are not really everyone's cup of tea in my country.

The expression needs the possessive form everyone's to show that the cup of tea belongs figuratively to each person. Everyone is not possessive, so use everyone's before cup.

× There are some people who are enjoy cycling though, but many of us. Does not have bike.

✓ There are some people who enjoy cycling, though, but many of us do not have bikes.

This sentence describes a general situation, so use the simple present: people who enjoy cycling. Do not put are before the base verb enjoy in this habitual statement.

× Does not have bike.

✓ Many of us do not have bikes.

The subject is many of us, which takes do, not does. Include the subject with the verb so the clause is complete, and use do not have.

× Does not have bike.

✓ Many of us do not have bikes.

Bikes refers generally to bicycles owned by multiple people, so the plural form is appropriate. Use bikes rather than the singular bike in this general statement.