Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 先直接回答小时候是否有自行车，并统一使用过去时（如 *I had*、*I rode*、*was*）。接着说明骑车上学的原因，再用一两句讲清楚那次事故；注意不要重复开头或在句子中途换时态。

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My middle school was quite far from home, so I usually rode my bike there. Once, a taxi suddenly crossed the road and hit me, which made me much more careful around traffic.

提案: 回答观点后，用一个清晰、具体的观察作为支持，例如学生骑车上学或通勤者骑车出行。描述日常情况时统一使用一般现在时（如 *I see*），并用 *for example* 或 *also* 衔接；删除重复词语，注意说 *students ride bikes*，而不是 *students by bike*。

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among students. Many of them ride to school because it is convenient and inexpensive. I also see lots of people cycling when I drive to work each day.

× I have a bike

✓ I had a bike

这句话是在回忆童年经历，应使用一般过去时。将 have 改为 had。

× I have a bike in when I was child

✓ I had a bike when I was a child

in 不能放在 when 引导的时间从句前，应删除。描述“小时候”可以说 when I was a child。

× when I was child

✓ when I was a child

child 是可数名词单数，前面需要冠词 a。

× my middle school is far away from my home so I will go to school by bike

✓ My middle school was far from my home, so I went to school by bike.

这部分描述的是学生小时候的情况，应使用过去时：is 改为 was，will go 改为 went。

× one day when I when I go to my middle school, a taxi suddenly rush across the road

✓ One day, when I was going to middle school, a taxi suddenly rushed across the road

叙述过去发生的事情时，正在进行的动作可用过去进行时 was going，突然发生的动作应使用一般过去时 rushed。

× they hit he

✓ it hit me

这里的 it 指前面的单数名词 taxi；表示“撞到我”时，应使用宾格 me，不能用主格 he。

× there are many st students go to school by bike

✓ There are many students who go to school by bike.

原句中 are many students 和 go 之间缺少连接成分。可加 who 引导定语从句，说明这些学生会骑自行车上学。

× every day I went to every day I go to work during during I'm driving the car I saw many friend many students by bike

✓ Every day, when I drive to work, I see many students riding bikes.

这里表达每天都会发生的习惯，应使用一般现在时：go、drive、see。原句中的 went 和 saw 是过去时，与“每天”的习惯性描述不一致。

× many friend

✓ many friends

many 后面应接可数名词复数，因此 friend 应改为 friends。不过结合后文，若实际想表达“许多学生”，直接说 many students 更自然。