Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer directly, then add a clear detail. Your response does this, but “was given by my aunt as a gift” is wordy, and “during my graduation in grade school” sounds unnatural. Use “my aunt gave it to me as a graduation gift” and, if you remember, add a specific detail about the bike or how you used it.

例: Yes, I had a bike as a child. My aunt gave it to me as a graduation gift when I finished elementary school, and I used to ride it around our neighborhood.

提案: Give a direct answer and explain it with a smoothly connected reason. “Since given” is grammatically incorrect, and “bicycle- bicycles became the alternatives” contains a restart and awkward wording. Say “because of traffic congestion” and use “bicycles have become a popular alternative” to describe a current trend. You could also add a concrete example of who uses them.

例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country. Because of heavy traffic, bicycles have become a convenient alternative for short trips, especially for people commuting to work or school.

× I think so, since given the current, uh, traffic problems in our country, bicycle- bicycles became the alternatives for transportation.

✓ I think so. Given the current traffic problems in our country, bicycles are an alternative means of transportation.

Since normally introduces a clause with a subject and a finite verb. Since given does not form a complete clause here. Remove since and use Given the current traffic problems as an introductory phrase. Also omit the spoken false start bicycle- in the corrected written sentence.

× I think so, since given the current, uh, traffic problems in our country, bicycle- bicycles became the alternatives for transportation.

✓ I think so. Given the current traffic problems in our country, bicycles are an alternative means of transportation.

The question asks whether bikes are popular in the country generally, so use the present tense are rather than the past tense became. For general facts or current situations, use the present tense.