Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 先直接回答是否有自行车，并注意用词准确：这里应说“bike”，不是“bag”。描述过去经历时要统一使用过去时，例如“was given”“practised”“could ride”。“a birthday gift which gave by my father”应改为“a birthday gift from my father”或“a bike my father gave me”。结尾可以简洁说明学会骑车后的感受，避免不自然的“so much proud of me”。

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a birthday present from my father, and I used to practise riding it with a friend. After a while, I learned to ride on my own, which made my father very proud.

提案: 回答中把“bikes”说成了“bags”，要注意关键词准确。理由清楚，但“show distance trips”应为“short-distance trips”，“in crowded city”应为“in crowded cities”。比较价格时可用“much cheaper”，并补充一个具体场景，让内容更自然、连贯。

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in China, especially in crowded cities. They’re much cheaper to buy and maintain than cars, and they’re convenient for short trips to school or work. Many people also use shared bikes to get around.

× When I was young, it was a birthday gift which gave by my father.

✓ When I was young, it was a birthday gift which was given to me by my father.

这里想表达“礼物是父亲送给我的”，需要使用被动语态：be + 过去分词。原句缺少 be 动词，且 give 的过去分词是 given。

× I often practiced a lot with my friend and then finally I can totally ride along.

✓ I often practiced a lot with my friend, and then finally I could ride.

这句话描述的是小时候发生的事情，时态应保持过去时。表示当时“能够”做某事，应将 can 改为过去式 could。

× So I think my father is so much proud of me.

✓ So I think my father is very proud of me.

proud 是形容词，不能用 so much 修饰。表达“非常自豪”时，可以用 very proud 或 so proud。

× They are practical for show distance trips in crowded city.

✓ They are practical for short-distance trips in crowded cities.

这里是在泛指拥挤的城市，因此 city 应使用复数 cities。