Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer directly first, then describe who bought you the bike and how you used it. Use past-tense verbs consistently: “had,” “bought,” and “went.” Say “every morning” rather than “every day at the morning,” and use “fun” or “enjoyable” instead of “funny” to describe a pleasant experience. Keep the details clear and avoid repeating “bike.”

例: Yes, I did. My grandfather bought me a red bike, and we used to ride together every morning. I really enjoyed those rides, so they’re still a happy memory from my childhood.

提案: Give a clear answer to the question and complete your thought. Use “cycling” or “riding bikes” as the subject, and say “people riding bikes” rather than “a people” or “a young man who ride.” You could compare the past with the present and add a specific reason or example. Avoid ending with “and” unless you continue the sentence.

例: Yes, I think bikes are more popular in my country now than they were a few years ago. You can see people of different ages riding them in parks and around residential areas. I think many people enjoy cycling because it’s convenient and good exercise.

× When I was a child, I have a red bike.

✓ When I was a child, I had a red bike.

The sentence refers to a time in the past, so use the past-tense form had instead of have. When describing something you owned during a past period, keep the verb in the past tense.

× a red bike which is my grandfather bought me

✓ a red bike that my grandfather bought me

The relative clause incorrectly includes both which and is. Use that as the object of bought, and remove is. A relative clause should not contain an extra verb that makes its structure ungrammatical.

× every day at the morning

✓ every morning

At the morning is not the standard expression for this time of day. Say every morning or, if retaining every day, every day in the morning.

× me and my grandfather

✓ my grandfather and I

This phrase is the subject of the sentence, so use the subject pronoun I rather than the object pronoun me. In standard English, place the other person before yourself: my grandfather and I.

× my grandfather go out and ride his bike

✓ my grandfather went out and rode his bike

These actions happened when you were a child, so use the past-tense forms went and rode. Keep the verbs in the same tense when describing actions that occurred during the same past period.

× we can see everywhere a people

✓ we can see people everywhere

In this context, the speaker means multiple individuals, so use the plural noun people without the singular article a. For a general plural noun, say people, not a people.

× we can see everywhere a people

✓ we can see people everywhere

Everywhere is more naturally placed after the object in this sentence. The usual order is see people everywhere, rather than see everywhere people.

× a young man who ride a bike

✓ a young man who rides a bike

The relative pronoun who refers to the singular noun man, so the present-tense verb needs the third-person singular ending -s: rides.

× Actually riding a bike was not so popular 3-4 years ago, but nowadays we can see everywhere a people, a young man who ride a bike and.

✓ Actually, riding bikes was not very popular three or four years ago, but nowadays we can see people riding bikes everywhere, especially young men.

The original sentence ends with and, leaving the thought incomplete, and its final list of people is not clearly structured. Complete the contrast with a full clause and use a clear example phrase such as especially young men. This correction also applies the relevant number, verb-agreement, and adverb-placement rules.