Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 先直接回答过去是否有自行车，注意使用过去时，例如“I had a bike”。语法上应说“my mom bought it for me”或“my mom gave it to me”，而不是“my mom bought it to me”。“partner”通常指伴侣，可根据实际意思改为“friend”。删去未完成的“and we can”，并补充一个具体细节，例如骑车去公园或感受微风。尽量控制在三句左右，避免重复使用“bike”。

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My mom gave it to me for my birthday, and I often rode it to the park with my friends. I really enjoyed it because cycling was fun and relaxing.

提案: 开头直接说明自行车现在是否流行，再清楚地对比过去和现在。注意时态：谈过去用“were”，谈现在用“are”；“are in popular”应改为“were popular”或“are popular”。“lots of yard and road”表达不清，可换成“many roads in the countryside”。结尾没有说完，应完整说明汽车和摩托车普及后自行车受欢迎程度的变化，并给出具体原因。避免重复“motor”，可使用“motorbikes and cars”。

例: Bikes used to be very popular in my country, especially in the countryside, where people often rode them to school or work. These days, more people own motorbikes and cars, so bicycles are less common for commuting. However, many people still use them for exercise or short trips.

× Yes I have a bike.

✓ Yes, I had a bike.

问题问的是你小时候是否有自行车，因此应使用过去时。把 have 改为 had。

× When I was a kid I mom bought it to me as my birthday gift and I like to ride a bike with my partner and into the park and we can. I think it's so funny and relaxing.

✓ When I was a kid, my mom bought it for me as a birthday gift. I liked riding my bike with my partner in the park, and we thought it was fun and relaxing.

讲述小时候发生的事情时，应用过去时：把 like 改为 liked，把 think 和 is 改为 thought 和 was。表达“给我买”应说 bought it for me，而不是 bought it to me。原句中的“I mom”语序错误，应改为“my mom”；“and we can”没有完整表达，句子结构不完整。

× I think in the past bikes are in popular in my country because there are lots of yard and road in countryside and people can ride a bike to school and work, but nowadays there are lots of motor, motor bike, motor car like

✓ I think bikes were popular in my country in the past because there were lots of yards and roads in the countryside, and people could ride bikes to school and work. But nowadays, there are lots of motorbikes and cars.

描述过去的情况时，应用过去时：are 改为 were，there are 改为 there were，can 改为 could。“popular”前不需要介词 in，应说“were popular”。“lots of”后面的可数名词通常用复数，因此 yard 和 road 应改为 yards 和 roads。固定表达是“in the countryside”。原句末尾的“like”没有接续完整内容，造成句子不完整；修改后用完整句子表达对比。