Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: You answer the question directly and give a relevant reason. To sound more natural, say “learn to ride a bike” rather than “learn cycling,” and “give each child individual attention” rather than “focus on anyone particular child.” You could also connect the reason more smoothly with “because.”

例: No, I never had a bike as a child, so I didn’t get the chance to learn to ride one. I had four siblings, and my parents had to divide their attention among all of us.

提案: Your answer includes relevant context and a clear reason, but clarify whether you mean bicycles or motorcycles, since “bikes” can refer to either. Use the natural phrase “I live in Karachi,” and replace “regardless of it being a metropolitan city” with “even though it’s a major city.” The final point would be clearer as “heavy traffic makes cycling unsafe.” Avoid restarting “mode of transportation” and keep the answer focused.

例: Bicycles aren’t especially popular for getting around in Pakistan, although motorcycles are common. I live in Karachi, and even though it’s a major city, there aren’t many people cycling on the roads. The heavy traffic can make cycling unsafe.

× Unfortunately, I never had the opportunity to learn cycling growing up.

✓ Unfortunately, I never had the opportunity to learn to cycle while growing up.

In this meaning, learn is normally followed by an infinitive with to, as in learn to cycle. Use learn + -ing when referring to gaining knowledge or skill in a different construction, such as learning about cycling.

× I had four siblings and that just made it difficult for my parents to focus on anyone particular child.

✓ I had four siblings, and that just made it difficult for my parents to focus on any particular child.

Anyone is an indefinite pronoun and cannot directly modify the noun child. Use any before a noun, as in any particular child.

× I particularly live in Karaji and regardless of it being a metropolitan city, we don't see a lot of bikers on the road.

✓ I live in Karachi, and although it is a metropolitan city, we don't see a lot of bikers on the road.

Particularly does not fit naturally here because the sentence is stating where you live, not emphasizing a specific location. Use I live in Karachi. Karachi is also the standard spelling of the city’s name; although is used here to express the contrast clearly.

× We do have heavy traffic most days, which makes it a hazard for bikers to drive with safety.

✓ We do have heavy traffic most days, which makes it hazardous for bikers to ride safely.

With safety is not the natural adverbial expression in this sentence. Use the adverb safely to describe how bikers ride. Hazardous also makes the meaning more direct: the traffic makes riding dangerous.