Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ответ не отвечает на вопрос и не позволяет понять, была ли у вас в детстве велосипед. Сначала дайте прямой ответ, затем добавьте одну конкретную деталь, например, где вы катались или кто научил вас ездить. Используйте простые, понятные фразы.

例: Yes, I did. I got my first bike when I was about eight, and I used to ride it around my neighborhood with my friends.

提案: Вы отвечаете по теме, но формулировка «I think yes» неестественна: лучше сказать «Yes, I think they are». Уберите слова-паразиты и повтор «a lot of teenagers». Исправьте выражения: говорят «ride bikes», а не «cycle in the bike», и «go home», а не «go to the home». Добавьте точную причину или пример и свяжите идеи с помощью linking words.

例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among teenagers. Many of them ride to school or around their neighborhoods because it’s convenient and inexpensive.

× I think yes, because a lot of, uh, teenagers are uh, cycling in the bike in the morning often and that's why after school a lot of uh, teenagers are going to the home with their bikes.

✓ I think so, because a lot of teenagers often cycle in the morning, and that's why after school a lot of teenagers go home on their bikes.

The answer describes a general habit, so use the simple present cycle and go rather than the present continuous are cycling and are going. Use often before the main verb cycle to make the frequency clear.

× I think yes, because a lot of, uh, teenagers are uh, cycling in the bike in the morning often and that's why after school a lot of uh, teenagers are going to the home with their bikes.

✓ I think so, because a lot of teenagers often cycle in the morning, and that's why after school a lot of teenagers go home on their bikes.

In English, people cycle or ride a bike; they do not cycle in a bike. The natural phrase for traveling by bicycle is on their bikes.

× I think yes, because a lot of, uh, teenagers are uh, cycling in the bike in the morning often and that's why after school a lot of uh, teenagers are going to the home with their bikes.

✓ I think so, because a lot of teenagers often cycle in the morning, and that's why after school a lot of teenagers go home on their bikes.

Do not use the before home when home means the place where someone lives and follows go. Say go home, not go to the home.