Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer directly, then add one relevant detail about the bike or how you used it. Reduce fillers and repetition, and use the natural phrase “as a birthday present.” Finish the final thought clearly—for example, say it was your first bike.

例: Yes, I had a cute little bike when I was about four. My father gave it to me as a birthday present, and it was my first bike. I remember riding it in the park with my family.

提案: Give a clear opinion and support it with a specific reason or example. Use the plural “bikes” after “many people riding,” and replace “in a typical day” with a more natural phrase such as “on a typical day.”

例: I don’t think bikes are very popular where I live. On a typical day, I rarely see people commuting by bike, perhaps because traffic is busy and public transport is convenient. However, people sometimes ride bikes for exercise or recreation.

× My father gave me the bike for my birthday gift.

✓ My father gave me the bike as a birthday gift.

Use as to describe what the bike was. For my birthday is also correct, but for my birthday gift does not express this meaning naturally. You could say, My father gave me the bike for my birthday.

× I don't see many people riding bike in a typical day.

✓ I don't see many people riding bikes on a typical day.

Bike is a singular countable noun here, so it needs an article or should be plural. Because you are speaking generally about cycling, bikes is natural. Also, use on a typical day, not in a typical day.