Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ответ начинается прямо, но далее есть ошибки во временах и неестественные выражения: для прошлого используйте “didn’t have”, а для умения ездить на велосипеде — “ride a bike”. Фраза “I cannot just to how” непонятна; лучше кратко объяснить причину. Уберите “uh” и “and that's all”, чтобы ответ звучал увереннее.

例: Actually, no. I didn’t have a bike as a child because I never learned how to ride one.

提案: Выражайте мнение сразу, затем добавьте одну-две конкретные причины. Избегайте повторения “in my country” и “a lot of”, а также пауз-заполнителей. По-английски говорят “ride a bike”, не “drive a bike”; вместо “more healthier” используйте “healthier”. Последнюю фразу “it's like kind of supporting” нужно удалить или заменить понятным пояснением.

例: Definitely. Bikes are popular in my country, especially among children and people who commute short distances. They’re an affordable way to get around, and cycling also helps people stay healthy.

× When I was a child, I don't have a bike.

✓ When I was a child, I didn't have a bike.

The sentence refers to a period in the past, indicated by when I was a child. Use the simple past didn't have instead of the present-tense form don't have.

× because I cannot just to how, uh, drive this and that's all.

✓ because I didn't know how to ride one.

The original clause has an incomplete and incorrectly ordered structure. Use know how to followed by a verb in its base form. Since the speaker is describing childhood, use the past form didn't know. Ride is the natural verb for using a bike.

× it's a very useful, beneficial, uh, way just to becoming more healthier than now.

✓ it's a very useful and beneficial way to become healthier than they are now.

When to expresses purpose, it is followed by the base form of a verb, not an -ing form. Therefore, use to become, not to becoming.

× more healthier

✓ healthier

Healthier is already the comparative form of healthy. Do not add more to an adjective that already ends in -er.

× healthier than now

✓ healthier than they are now

The comparison should be between the people at two points in time, not between people and the word now. Use they are now to make the comparison object clear.