Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer the question directly, then give one clear reason or example. Use the past tense consistently: say “lived” rather than “are living.” “Small neighbor” is not the right expression here; use “small neighborhood.” The explanation about booking a car is unclear, so explain whether your family could not afford a bike or did not have space for one. Avoid restarting or trailing off, and keep the answer to a few complete sentences.

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. I grew up in a small neighborhood, and my parents thought I could get around easily on foot or by car. I sometimes borrowed a friend’s bike, though.

提案: Give a clear answer and support it with a complete reason. Use plural forms such as “cars,” and say “public transport” rather than “trans public transport.” Avoid repeating “because”; connect your ideas with a linking word such as “since.” Finish the thought—for example, explain that heavy traffic makes cycling or public transport more practical.

例: Not really. In my country, many people rely on cars and public transport because they need to travel between different parts of their city. However, cycling can be a convenient option in areas with heavy traffic, especially for short journeys.

× because we are living in a small neighbor

✓ because we were living in a small neighbor

The speaker is describing childhood, so the verb should be in the past tense. Use were living rather than are living to match that past time.

× my parents they didn't find the time

✓ my parents didn't find the time

My parents is already the subject, so the additional subject pronoun they is unnecessary. Use only one subject.

× Usually I use the car for my uh friend

✓ Usually, I used the car for my friend.

The answer describes the speaker's childhood, so use the past-tense verb used rather than the present-tense verb use.

× people usually use regular car

✓ people usually use regular cars

Regular cars refers to cars in general, so the plural form cars is appropriate. A singular countable noun would instead need an article, as in a regular car.

× because sometimes the jam and traffic uh is

✓ because sometimes the traffic jams and congestion are heavy

The subject refers to multiple traffic jams and congestion, so it takes the plural verb are, not is. The original thought also trails off; this correction completes it as a grammatical clause.