Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ответьте прямо и используйте прошедшее время: «Yes, I did». Исправьте грамматику: говорите «when I was six», «my parents gave me» и «the bicycle I wanted». Уберите лишние паузы и повторения; добавьте одну конкретную деталь, например, где вы катались или почему вам нравился велосипед.

例: Yes, I did. My parents gave me the bicycle I wanted when I was six. I used to ride it around our neighborhood after school.

提案: Начните с ясного ответа, например: «Yes, I think they’re quite popular». Не повторяйте «In my opinion» и избегайте утверждения «everyone», если оно слишком общее. Уточните, кто и для чего ездит на велосипедах, и добавьте связку, например «because» или «for example». Используйте естественное выражение «ride a bike», а не «drive a bicycle».

例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among children and people who live in smaller towns. Many people ride them to school or work because they’re affordable and convenient.

× I have a bike when I was a child.

✓ I had a bike when I was a child.

The sentence refers to a completed period in the past, so use the past-tense form had rather than the present-tense form have.

× I was a six years old.

✓ I was six years old.

Do not use the article a before an age expressed with a number and years old. Say six years old.

× My parents present me the bicycle.

✓ My parents gave me the bicycle.

The event happened when the speaker was a child, so the verb should be in the past tense. Gave is the past form of give.

× The bicycle that I want.

✓ The bicycle that I wanted.

The speaker is describing a bicycle they wanted in the past, so use wanted rather than want.

× The everyone drives a bicycle in our country.

✓ Everyone drives a bicycle in our country.

Everyone is an indefinite pronoun and does not take the definite article the.

× In our country, everyone, so it's their children, it's adults.

✓ In our country, everyone, whether children or adults, drives a bicycle.

The original phrase has no clear grammatical connection between its parts. Use the structure whether children or adults to express that the statement applies to both groups.