Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer directly using the past tense, since the question asks about your childhood. Describe the bike and explain briefly who chose or bought it. Avoid fillers such as “um” and repeated phrases, and use a clear sentence instead of “it’s like.”

例: Yes, I had a red bike when I was a child. My parents chose it for me because they thought it was a good one. I loved riding it around my neighborhood.

提案: Give a clear opinion first, then support it with a specific example. Use “bikes” or “cycling” with correct subject–verb agreement, and say “prefer using bikes to taking the bus or a taxi.” Avoid repeating “Parisian people” and “French people”; also, explain that cycling is a common form of transport rather than calling it “the biggest transport.”

例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in France, especially in Paris. Many people cycle to work or use shared bikes to get around the city. They may prefer cycling to taking a bus or taxi because it can be convenient in busy areas.

× Yeah, I have a bike.

✓ Yeah, I had a bike.

The question asks about your childhood, so use the past tense had rather than the present tense have.

× It's like it's a red bike.

✓ It was a red bike.

You are describing a bike you had as a child, so use was to keep the answer in the past tense.

× My father and my mother um told to me it's like the best bike, who want, who they want um to uh to buy and that's it.

✓ My parents told me it was the best bike they wanted to buy, and that was it.

Tell is followed directly by the person receiving the information: told me, not told to me. Use the past tense was to match the past context.

× My father and my mother um told to me it's like the best bike, who want, who they want um to uh to buy and that's it.

✓ My parents told me it was the best bike they wanted to buy, and that was it.

Who refers to people, not to a bike. In this sentence, omit the relative pronoun or use that to refer to the bike.

× Yeah, I think because I live in France and the bike are really used in Paris to uh because it's like just the biggest transport.

✓ Yeah, I think so because I live in France, and bikes are widely used in Paris because they are one of the main means of transport.

I think because does not clearly complete the response. Say I think so because to give a complete answer, and remove the interrupted phrase to before because.

× Yeah, I think because I live in France and the bike are really used in Paris to uh because it's like just the biggest transport.

✓ Yeah, I think so because I live in France, and bikes are widely used in Paris because they are one of the main means of transport.

The original subject and verb do not agree: singular bike cannot go with are. Use the plural subject bikes with are.

× Like the Parisian people, the French people preferred use bike about just a bus or taxi.

✓ French people prefer using bikes to using buses or taxis.

This describes a general preference, so use the present tense prefer rather than the past tense preferred.

× Like the Parisian people, the French people preferred use bike about just a bus or taxi.

✓ French people prefer using bikes to using buses or taxis.

Use the gerund using after prefer in this construction. The parallel form using bikes to using buses makes the comparison clear.

× Like the Parisian people, the French people preferred use bike about just a bus or taxi.

✓ French people prefer using bikes to using buses or taxis.

Use to in the construction prefer one activity to another. About is not the correct preposition for this comparison.

× Like the Parisian people, the French people preferred use bike about just a bus or taxi.

✓ French people prefer using bikes to using buses or taxis.

When speaking generally about a type of transport, use the plural count noun bikes. Use buses and taxis in the plural to make the comparison general and consistent.