Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer directly using the past-tense phrase “I had a bike.” Avoid restarting or repeating words such as “that wanted” and “one one.” You can describe your enthusiasm more naturally with a phrase like “I was eager to explore,” then add the detail about your dad as a supporting example.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I was eager to explore new places, so I asked my dad to buy me one. He surprised me with a bike one day, and I was absolutely thrilled.

提案: Give a clear opinion instead of opening with “I don’t have a big idea,” which sounds unnatural and hesitant. Use “to get around” or “for transportation” rather than “to transport,” and explain the benefits clearly. Avoid unclear wording such as “be aware of involvement”; you could mention reducing pollution instead.

例: Yes, I think bikes are fairly popular in my country, especially in busy cities. Many people use them to get around because they can avoid traffic jams and are cheaper than driving. They’re also a more environmentally friendly option.

× I actually have one bike when I was a child.

✓ I actually had a bike when I was a child.

The sentence refers to a situation in the past, as shown by when I was a child, so use the past-tense form had instead of have. Use a bike rather than one bike unless you need to emphasize the number.

× I was a kid that want that wanted so much to move and to experience new things.

✓ I was a kid who wanted so much to move and experience new things.

The sentence describes the speaker as a child in the past, so the verb should be wanted, not want. The repeated that want appears to be a false start; remove it to make the sentence clear. Use who to refer naturally to a person.