Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Bạn trả lời đúng trọng tâm và có thêm thông tin về món quà cũng như thói quen hiện tại. Tuy nhiên, cần dùng thì quá khứ nhất quán: nói “I had” thay vì “I have”, và diễn đạt tự nhiên hơn là “a present from my parents” hoặc “my parents gave it to me”. Tránh lặp “when I was small” và “by by”; có thể nối ý bằng “These days” hoặc “However”.

例: Yes, I did. I had a small bike that my parents gave me for my tenth birthday. These days, though, I usually travel by motorbike because I have a busy schedule.

提案: Bạn đã nêu quan điểm và đưa ra lý do, nhưng câu trả lời có nhiều từ ngập ngừng và phần giải thích chưa rõ ràng. Hãy bắt đầu trực tiếp bằng “Yes, I think they are”, sau đó nêu nhóm người hoặc khu vực cụ thể. Tránh khẳng định xe đạp dễ dùng hơn xe máy hay ô tô đối với cả người lớn tuổi và trẻ em; hãy giải thích hợp lý hơn, chẳng hạn xe đạp phổ biến vì tiết kiệm, tiện cho quãng đường ngắn hoặc được trẻ em yêu thích.

例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among children and people who live in smaller towns. They are affordable and convenient for short trips. However, in busy cities, many adults prefer motorbikes because they can travel longer distances more quickly.

× I have a small bike when I was small.

✓ I had a small bike when I was a child.

The question asks about a past experience, and the phrase when I was a child also refers to the past. Use the past-tense form had, not the present-tense form have.

× That was a present of my parents.

✓ That was a present from my parents.

Use from to identify who gave the present. Of does not express the giver in this context.

× A present of my parents giving to me when I was 10 years old.

✓ A present from my parents, who gave it to me when I was 10 years old.

Giving does not correctly connect the parents to the action in this sentence. Use the past-tense verb gave in a relative clause because the giving happened in the past.

× Or I think it's definitely, uh, very common for people, especially children and elderly.

✓ I think bikes are definitely very common, especially among children and older adults.

Or introduces an alternative or contrast, but no alternative is being presented here. Omit Or. Among is also a natural way to describe the groups in which bikes are common.

× Because umm, they, they are, umm, they will be. It would be much easier for them to use a bike rather than using a motorbike or driving a car.

✓ Bikes are popular because it is much easier for children and older adults to ride a bike than to use a motorbike or drive a car.

The clause beginning with because is left incomplete, and they will be does not complete the intended idea. Connect the reason directly to the main clause to form a complete sentence.