Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear and directly answers the question, but it repeats the question without adding detail. Include one specific memory, such as how old you were, where you rode, or what the bike was like.

例: Yes, I did. I had a small blue bike when I was about eight, and I used to ride it around my neighborhood.

提案: Your answer includes conflicting and unclear information about Mongolia and Durham, so the main point is difficult to follow. State your opinion about bike use in your country first, then add a clear supporting detail. Check place names and grammar—for example, say “people like riding bikes.”

例: I don’t think bikes are very popular in Mongolia, although it depends on the area. In Durham, where I live, I often see people riding bikes around the city.

× Durham is the place where it's located which is located in Mongolia and uh Dahan has so many bikes way and people likes to ride a bike in Durham.

✓ Durham is a place in Mongolia, and it has many bikes. People like to ride bikes there.

The clause where it's located is followed by a second, redundant clause, which is located in Mongolia, making the sentence structure unclear. The phrase bikes way does not form a grammatical expression in this context. Use a clear independent clause, such as Durham is a place in Mongolia, and connect the ideas with a conjunction or separate them into sentences.

× Durham is the place where it's located which is located in Mongolia and uh Dahan has so many bikes way and people likes to ride a bike in Durham.

✓ People like to ride bikes in Durham.

People is a plural subject, so it takes the base-form verb like, not the singular form likes. When the subject is plural, make sure the verb agrees with it: people like.