Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer in the past tense because the question asks about your childhood: say “I had a bike.” Avoid restarting phrases such as “I’m pretty, I’m pretty sure,” and remove the repeated “with my friend.” Describe the bike clearly, then explain what you did with it. The phrase “take my friend to stroll around the park” is unnatural; say “ride around the park with my friend.”

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was small and purple, and I remember riding it around the park with my friends. I really enjoyed taking turns riding it.

提案: Give a clear, natural estimate instead of saying “definitely 50/50” and repeating it at the end. Use “many people” rather than “half of the majority people,” and say “ride bikes” or “cycle.” Explain the contrast more precisely: some people cycle for enjoyment or short trips, while others choose motorcycles because they are in a hurry or need to travel farther.

例: I’d say bikes are fairly popular in my country, especially for short trips. Many people enjoy cycling because it’s relaxing and inexpensive. However, people who need to travel quickly often prefer motorcycles, so bikes aren’t everyone’s first choice.

× Yes, I have a bike.

✓ Yes, I had a bike.

The question asks about the student's childhood, so the answer should use the past tense. Use had rather than have to describe owning the bike in the past.

× When I was a child it I remember that I'm pretty, I'm pretty sure that the colour is purple.

✓ When I was a child, I remember that the bike was purple.

The original sentence has an unnecessary it, and the repeated phrase interrupts the sentence structure. Remove the extra word and repetition. Was purple is appropriate because the speaker is describing the bike from childhood.

× It's a very small bike with two seats, so I usually like to take my friend to stroll around the park with my friend.

✓ It was a very small bike with two seats, so I usually took my friend for a stroll around the park.

The speaker is describing a bike and a routine from childhood, so the verbs should be in the past tense: was and took. The phrase take my friend for a stroll expresses the intended meaning clearly and avoids repeating with my friend.

× In my country there are half of the majority people that like to use bike because they think it's just very fun and chill.

✓ In my country, about half of the people like to use bikes because they think it is fun and relaxing.

Half of the majority people is not a correct or clear quantifier phrase. Use about half of the people to express the intended proportion.

× People that like to use bike

✓ People who like to use bikes

Bike is a countable noun used here to refer to bicycles in general, so it should be plural: bikes. Use a singular form with an article, such as use a bike, when referring to one bicycle.