Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Jawaban sudah menjawab pertanyaan secara langsung, tetapi gunakan bentuk lampau karena pertanyaannya tentang masa kecil. Frasa “since I see it on the elementary school” tidak alami dan maknanya kurang jelas. Sebutkan kapan Anda mendapat sepeda dan, jika sesuai, tambahkan satu detail tentang cara Anda menggunakannya.

例: Yes, I did. I got my first bike when I was in elementary school, and I used to ride it around my neighborhood.

提案: Jawaban sudah menyampaikan pendapat, tetapi gunakan bentuk jamak “bikes” untuk membicarakan sepeda secara umum. Perbaiki tata bahasa “parents usually buy” (bukan “are usually bought”) dan ungkapkan tujuannya secara alami, misalnya agar anak-anak bisa berangkat ke sekolah. Gabungkan kalimat yang berulang dan tambahkan detail spesifik bila memungkinkan.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. Many parents buy them for their children because they make it easier for them to travel to school.

× Yes, I have a bike since I see it on the elementary school.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was in elementary school.

The question asks about the student's childhood, so the answer should use the past tense. Use had rather than have and was rather than see.

× Yes, I have a bike since I see it on the elementary school.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was in elementary school.

Use in, not on, to describe being a student at this level of education. The natural phrase is in elementary school.

× Yes. Bike is popular in my country.

✓ Yes. Bikes are popular in my country.

When speaking about bicycles in general, use the plural noun bikes rather than the singular noun bike without an article.

× Parents are usually bought it for their children to ask them their mobility to go to their school.

✓ Parents usually buy bikes for their children so that they can get to school more easily.

Parents perform the action of buying, so use the active form usually buy, not the passive form are usually bought. Use the present simple for a general habit.

× Parents are usually bought it for their children to ask them their mobility to go to their school.

✓ Parents usually buy bikes for their children so that they can get to school more easily.

The phrase to ask them their mobility is not a grammatical or natural way to express the intended purpose. Use a purpose clause such as so that they can get to school more easily.