Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer directly using the past tense, since the question is about your childhood. Avoid repeating the same idea, and add one specific detail, such as when you rode the bike or what you used it for. Remember to say “when I was a child.”

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I used to ride it around my neighborhood after school, and I really enjoyed it.

提案: State your opinion clearly, then give one or two reasons with linking words such as “because” and “also.” Avoid repeating words, and use accurate phrases like “most people have cars” and “enough bike lanes.” Be careful not to make an overly broad claim such as “all people.”

例: I don’t think bikes are very popular in my country. Most people prefer to drive because cars are more convenient, and there aren’t enough bike lanes in many areas.

× Yes, I have a bike. I had a bike when I was child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike. I had a bike when I was a child.

The question asks about the student's childhood, so the response should use the past tense. Change have to had to match that past time.

× I had a bike when I was child.

✓ I had a bike when I was a child.

Child is a singular countable noun and needs an article here. Use a before child.

× I think bikes are not popular in my country because all people have a car and use they use car so and we don't have any enough bicycle road so people usually use car

✓ I think bikes are not popular in my country because everyone has a car and uses it, and we don't have enough bicycle lanes, so people usually use cars.

The phrase use they use repeats the verb and creates an incomplete, awkward structure. Use one clear verb phrase, such as uses it. The response also combines ideas with so and and in an unclear order; organize the reasons into a clear sentence.

× I think bikes are not popular in my country because all people have a car and use they use car so and we don't have any enough bicycle road so people usually use car

✓ I think bikes are not popular in my country because everyone has a car and uses it, and we don't have enough bicycle lanes, so people usually use cars.

Car is a singular countable noun, but it is used generally here, so use the plural form cars. Bicycle lanes is also plural because the sentence refers to bicycle infrastructure in general.

× We don't have any enough bicycle road.

✓ We don't have enough bicycle lanes.

Any should not be used with enough in this sentence. Use enough directly before the noun phrase: enough bicycle lanes.

× ...so and we don't have any enough bicycle road so people usually use car

✓ ...and we don't have enough bicycle lanes, so people usually use cars.

Do not combine so and and together to connect the same ideas. Use and to add another reason and so to introduce the result.