Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 답변의 핵심은 분명하지만, “when I was a 60 year old”는 어린 시절에 대한 질문과 맞지 않고 “write”는 문맥상 “ride”를 의미하는 것으로 보입니다. 나이를 정확히 말하고, 과거 경험이므로 동사의 시제를 일관되게 과거형으로 사용하세요. 자전거를 언제, 누구와 탔는지 구체적인 내용을 덧붙이면 더 자연스럽습니다.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was about six years old. I often rode it with my sister, especially when we went on picnics.

提案: 질문에 직접 답하고 이유를 제시한 점은 좋습니다. 다만 “the road which can use bike”는 자연스럽지 않으므로 “there are well-organised bike lanes”처럼 표현하세요. 자전거를 타는 사람이 많다는 점과 자전거 도로나 시설이 잘 갖춰져 있다는 점을 연결어로 이어 설명하면 답변이 더 명확하고 구체적입니다.

例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country. There are many people who ride them, and the bike lanes are well organised, so cycling is convenient and safe.

× Yes, I had a bike when I was a 60 year old and I often used to write that, especially when I want to go on a picnic with my sister.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was six years old and I often used to write that, especially when I want to go on a picnic with my sister.

When stating someone’s age, use the pattern was + number + years old, without an article before the number. The phrase a 60 year old would describe a person as a noun, rather than state their age. In this context, six years old fits the reference to being a child.

× Yes, I had a bike when I was a 60 year old and I often used to write that, especially when I want to go on a picnic with my sister.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was six years old and I often used to write that, especially when I wanted to go on a picnic with my sister.

The sentence describes a past habit, so the verb in the when-clause should also be in the past tense. Change want to wanted to maintain consistent past-tense framing.

× Yes I think so because there are many bike riders here and the road which can use bike is very well organised

✓ Yes, I think so because there are many bike riders here, and the roads where people can ride bikes are very well organised.

The original relative clause, which can use bike, is incomplete because it does not say who uses the road, and it makes the road sound as if it can use a bike. Use a complete clause with a subject and verb, such as where people can ride bikes. This also makes the plural noun bikes appropriate for speaking about bikes in general.