Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 질문에 직접 답한 점은 좋지만, ‘any bikes’와 ‘I’를 반복해 답변이 매끄럽지 않습니다. 마지막 문장은 앞의 내용을 되풀이하므로 삭제하세요. ‘I was a girl’이 자전거에 관심이 없었던 이유로 자연스럽게 연결되지는 않으니, 실제 경험이나 관심 부족을 이유로 설명하는 편이 좋습니다. 과거의 습관이나 기억을 한 가지 덧붙이면 답변이 더 구체적입니다.

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. I wasn’t particularly interested in cycling, so I usually played games with my friends instead.

提案: ‘I don’t think bikes are popular’라는 의견 뒤에 자전거를 타는 사람들의 사례를 제시했지만, 두 내용의 관계를 더 분명히 하세요. ‘enjoy it’은 복수형인 bikes를 받아 ‘enjoy cycling’으로 표현하는 것이 자연스럽고, ‘committing to work’는 ‘commuting to work’로 고쳐야 합니다. 이유를 두 가지 정도로 정리하고 연결어를 사용하면 더 논리적이고 간결한 답변이 됩니다.

例: I wouldn’t say bikes are extremely popular in Korea, but many people do enjoy cycling. For example, some ride bikes to stay healthy, while others use them to commute to work.

× I don't think bikes are popular in Korea, but some people enjoy enjoy it and some people do it for their health and some people use it for committing to work.

✓ I don't think bikes are popular in Korea, but some people enjoy them, and some people do it for their health, and some people use them for committing to work.

The pronoun it is singular, but it refers to bikes, which is plural. Use them to refer to bikes. The phrase do it can remain because it refers to the activity of riding a bike.