Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Bạn trả lời trực tiếp và có thêm chi tiết về hoạt động với bạn bè, nhưng cần giảm các từ ngập ngừng như “uh” và “um”. Dùng quá khứ nhất quán: “we often raced” thay vì “we often race”. Nên nói “ride around the neighborhood” và “race each other” để diễn đạt tự nhiên hơn.

例: Yes, I did. I used to ride my bike around the neighborhood with my friends every weekend, and we sometimes raced each other for fun.

提案: Bạn đã nêu quan điểm và cố gắng đưa ra lý do, nhưng câu trả lời có nhiều từ ngập ngừng, lặp ý và một số cụm khó hiểu như “bicycle is behind convenient” và “keep your air pollution free from pollution”. Hãy dùng cấu trúc rõ ràng hơn: nêu mức độ phổ biến, sau đó giải thích xe đạp tiện lợi cho những chuyến đi ngắn và tốt cho sức khỏe, đồng thời giảm ô nhiễm. Thay “wanna go anything” bằng “go places” hoặc “travel short distances”.

例: Yes, I think bicycles are quite popular in my country. They’re convenient for short trips, especially in busy areas, and cycling is also a good way to stay healthy and reduce air pollution.

× I used to ride with my friends and um uh go around neighborhood uh every weekend and we often race it also for fun.

✓ I used to ride with my friends and go around the neighborhood every weekend, and we often raced our bikes for fun.

The student is describing repeated activities in childhood, so raced should be in the past tense. Use raced rather than race to keep the verb tense consistent with the past-time context. Our bikes also makes the reference clearer than it.

× I used to ride with my friends and um uh go around neighborhood uh every weekend and we often race it also for fun.

✓ I used to ride with my friends and go around the neighborhood every weekend, and we often raced our bikes for fun.

Neighborhood is a singular countable noun used to refer to a specific area, so it needs an article here. Say the neighborhood rather than neighborhood.

× I think uh b- uh bicycle is behind convenient when I when people wanna go anything and it helps keep your air pollution, uh, free from pollution, uh, and uh good for health people.

✓ I think bicycles are very convenient when people want to go somewhere. They also help reduce air pollution and are good for people's health.

Bicycle is being used to make a general statement about bicycles, so use the plural form bicycles. The verb must also agree with this plural subject: bicycles are.

× I think uh b- uh bicycle is behind convenient when I when people wanna go anything and it helps keep your air pollution, uh, free from pollution, uh, and uh good for health people.

✓ I think bicycles are very convenient when people want to go somewhere. They also help reduce air pollution and are good for people's health.

Behind does not make sense as a modifier of convenient in this context. Use very to intensify the adjective: very convenient.

× I think uh b- uh bicycle is behind convenient when I when people wanna go anything and it helps keep your air pollution, uh, free from pollution, uh, and uh good for health people.

✓ I think bicycles are very convenient when people want to go somewhere. They also help reduce air pollution and are good for people's health.

Anything is not appropriate after go in this sentence. Use somewhere to refer to an unspecified destination, or anywhere in a negative or question context. Also, remove the repeated, unfinished phrase when I when.

× I think uh b- uh bicycle is behind convenient when I when people wanna go anything and it helps keep your air pollution, uh, free from pollution, uh, and uh good for health people.

✓ I think bicycles are very convenient when people want to go somewhere. They also help reduce air pollution and are good for people's health.

The phrases keep your air pollution free from pollution and good for health people are not structured naturally or grammatically. Use help reduce air pollution and are good for people's health to express the intended ideas clearly.