Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 질문에 직접 답한 점은 좋지만, 관사와 동사 형태가 어색합니다. “when I was about seven,” “bought me a bike,” “I rode my bike”처럼 표현하세요. 학교나 학원에 자전거를 타고 갔다는 구체적인 내용을 연결어와 함께 설명하고, 마지막 문장은 반복 대신 자전거를 타며 느낀 점으로 마무리하면 더 자연스럽습니다.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was about seven. My parents bought me one, and I used to ride it to school and to my after-school classes. I really enjoyed riding it because it gave me a sense of freedom.

提案: 의견은 제시했지만 마지막 문장이 완성되지 않아 답변의 의미가 불분명합니다. “most people think of cycling as a sport”처럼 자연스러운 표현을 사용하고, 왜 자전거가 교통수단으로는 덜 인기 있다고 생각하는지 이유를 덧붙이세요. 답변을 완성된 문장으로 마무리하고, “Honestly,” 뒤에는 불필요한 망설임을 줄여 보세요.

例: Honestly, I don’t think bikes are very popular as a way to get around in South Korea. Many people seem to associate cycling more with exercise or sport. As a result, they often use bikes for leisure rather than for their daily commute.

× My parents bought bike for me.

✓ My parents bought a bike for me.

The singular countable noun bike needs an article. Use a before bike when referring to one unspecified bike.

× I riding my bike to go to the school or go to like academic.

✓ I rode my bike to school or to an academy.

The speaker is describing childhood, so use the past-tense verb rode, not riding. The phrase go to school normally does not take the definite article the. Use an academy for one unspecified academy. The word academic is not the correct noun here.

× I riding my bike to go to the school or go to like academic.

✓ I rode my bike to school or to an academy.

When school refers to the general activity of attending school, it is used without the. Say go to school, not go to the school.

× I enjoy writing my bike.

✓ I enjoyed riding my bike.

The answer refers to the speaker's childhood, so the past-tense form enjoyed is appropriate. Riding is the correct verb for using a bike; writing has a different meaning.

× Umm honestly not because in South Korea mostly people think about bike is like sports.

✓ Honestly, no. In South Korea, most people think of biking as a sport.

The original sentence combines clauses in an unclear structure. Separate the short answer from the explanation, and use think of biking as a sport to express the intended relationship clearly.

× In South Korea mostly people think about bike is like sports.

✓ In South Korea, most people think of biking as a sport.

Most is needed before the noun people to mean the majority of people. Mostly is an adverb and does not fit this position.

× So when people riding bike.

✓ So people ride bikes mainly for exercise.

The original is an incomplete sentence: when people riding has no finite verb and does not express a complete thought. Use ride as the present-tense verb and finish the thought. The plural bikes is appropriate when speaking about bikes in general.