Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer directly, then add one or two specific details. The phrase “a bike that my mom gave me” is wordy, and saying it was both a gift and a birthday gift is repetitive. Instead of the general phrase “very comfortable,” describe a feature or how you felt riding it.

例: Yes, I did. My mom gave me a small blue bike for my fifth birthday. It was comfortable and easy to ride, so I used it almost every day.

提案: Give a direct answer and support it with a clear, specific reason or example. Avoid repeating that bikes are popular, and correct the sentence structure by saying “cycling is a great form of exercise” rather than “cycling, it's a great type of exercise.” You could also mention where or how people cycle.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, partly because cycling is an enjoyable way to exercise. For example, many people ride along riverside paths or cycle to work when the weather is good.

× In my country people like to exercise very much and cycling, it's a great type of exercise.

✓ In my country, people like to exercise very much, and cycling is a great type of exercise.

The original sentence has a comma splice: the comma after cycling incorrectly joins it to the independent clause it's a great type of exercise. Use is to make cycling the subject of that clause, and connect the two complete ideas with and. A comma after the introductory phrase In my country also improves readability.