Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer responds directly and includes a specific detail about the bike’s colors. To make it more developed, add one relevant detail, such as how often you rode it or what you enjoyed about it. You can also combine the two short sentences smoothly.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was pink and white, and I often rode it around my neighborhood after school.

提案: You give a clear opinion, but the explanation is difficult to understand because of inaccurate phrasing such as “they minimum runs use and drive bike.” Say that many children learn to ride or use bikes, and support your opinion with a specific reason or example. Avoid fillers like “um” where possible, and use linking words such as “because” or “for example” to connect your ideas.

例: Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country, especially among children. Many kids learn to ride them when they are young because cycling is fun and gives them a convenient way to get around.

× Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country because, um, in everyone's childhood they minimum runs use and drive bike and I think that's fun.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country because, um, everyone uses and rides a bike during childhood, and I think that's fun.

The phrase 'in everyone's childhood they minimum runs use and drive bike' has an unclear and incorrect word order, so the clause is difficult to understand. Organize it with a clear subject and verb, such as 'everyone uses and rides a bike during childhood.'

× Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country because, um, in everyone's childhood they minimum runs use and drive bike and I think that's fun.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country because, um, everyone uses and rides a bike during childhood, and I think that's fun.

The verb 'runs' does not agree with the plural subject 'they'; it would need to be 'run.' In the corrected sentence, 'everyone' is singular and correctly takes the verbs 'uses' and 'rides.'

× Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country because, um, in everyone's childhood they minimum runs use and drive bike and I think that's fun.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country because, um, everyone uses and rides a bike during childhood, and I think that's fun.

'Bike' is a singular countable noun, so it needs an article in this context. Use 'a bike' when referring to one bike in general. Also, the usual verb for traveling on a bike is 'ride,' rather than 'drive.'