Part 1
試験官
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
受験者
Uh, yes, it is the black one, uh, as they were number when I first arrived on it. Uh, it is uh, countryside night and uh, from France around me and I learned it.
試験官
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
受験者
Yes, when it comes to the bikes I have told me it is a popular one in the streets, in the countryside, in the cities and in the villages Childs and olds and the adults always have one. They ride it on the road.
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
スコア: 20.0提案: 回答开头可以直接说明小时候是否有自行车,然后补充一两个具体细节,例如自行车的颜色、是谁买的,或你在哪里学会骑车。原回答中有多处表达难以理解,时态和句子结构也不清楚。建议使用简单、完整的句子,并避免重复填充词,如“uh”。
例: Yes, I had a black bike when I was a child. My parents bought it for me when I was about seven. I learned to ride it in a quiet street near my home.
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
スコア: 40.0提案: 你已经直接表达了自行车很受欢迎,也提到了城市和乡村,这是相关的补充信息。不过,“I have told me”等表达不自然,“Childs and olds”也应改为“children and older people”。建议先给出清晰观点,再用一两个具体例子说明不同年龄的人在哪里或为什么骑车,避免把意思相近的地点和人群反复罗列。
例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. You can see people of all ages riding them, especially in cities and smaller towns. Many people use bikes for short trips because they are convenient and inexpensive.
× Uh, yes, it is the black one.
✓ Uh, yes, it was the black one.
问题询问的是小时候的经历,时间背景是过去,因此这里应使用过去式 was,而不是现在式 is。回答过去的经历时,要注意保持时态一致。
× when I first arrived on it
✓ when I first got on it
表示“第一次骑上/坐上自行车”时,通常用 get on;arrive on 不适合表达这个意思。可以记住:上自行车用 get on a bike,下自行车用 get off a bike。
× when it comes to the bikes
✓ when it comes to bikes
这里是在泛指自行车这一类事物,不是指前文提到的某几辆特定自行车,因此通常不需要定冠词 the。泛指复数可数名词时,通常直接使用复数形式。
× I have told me it is a popular one
✓ I have been told that they are popular
原句中的 me 不能在 told 后表示“有人告诉我”;表达这个意思时可以用被动结构 I have been told。后面的 they 指代复数的 bikes,因此应使用 they are,而不是 it is。
× Childs and olds and the adults always have one.
✓ Children, older people, and adults always have one.
child 的复数形式是不规则变化 children,不能写成 childs。old 通常不能直接这样作为人的复数名词使用;表达“老年人”可说 older people。列举不同人群时,名词形式应保持正确。