Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 질문에 직접 답한 점은 좋지만, “It was trend”는 “Bikes were popular”로, “Have have a bike”는 문맥에 맞게 “I had a bike”로 고치세요. 나이는 “when I was nine”처럼 간단히 말하고, 부모님이 자전거를 사 주신 일에 관한 구체적인 기억을 한 가지 덧붙이면 답변이 더 자연스럽고 풍성해집니다. 반복과 자기수정을 줄이도록 한 문장씩 차분하게 말해 보세요.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. Bikes were very popular among kids at the time, and my parents gave me one when I was nine. I used to ride it around my neighborhood after school.

提案: 현재 자전거가 인기 있는지 먼저 분명히 답하고, 과거와 비교하려면 “A few years ago, many people owned bikes, but now…”처럼 시제를 구분하세요. “It depends on the personality”는 이 질문에 어울리지 않으므로 빼고, 자전거 이용이 늘거나 줄어든 이유 또는 이용하는 사람들의 예를 한 가지 설명하세요. 답변이 중간에 끊겼으니 완결된 문장으로 마무리하는 연습도 필요합니다.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in cities with good cycling paths. A few years ago, fewer people used them for commuting, but now more people ride bikes to avoid traffic and get some exercise.

× It was trend when I was young.

✓ It was a trend when I was young.

The singular count noun trend needs an article. Use a before a singular count noun when referring to it generally.

× Have have a bike

✓ I had a bike

The answer refers to a childhood experience, so use the simple past had. Include the subject I, and remove the repeated verb.

× few years ago, few years ago lots of people

✓ A few years ago, lots of people

Use a before few in this expression. A few years ago means several years ago; few years ago is missing the article.

× lots of people had been had been had bike

✓ Lots of people had bikes

The sentence describes a past situation, so the simple past had is appropriate. Had been had is not the correct verb form here; remove the repeated forms.

× lots of people had bike

✓ Lots of people had bikes

Bike refers to a general plural group of bicycles in this context. Use the plural noun bikes after lots of people.

× but now there are we could see a lot of

✓ But now we can see a lot of...

There are and we could see are incorrectly joined in this clause. Use one clear subject and verb: we can see. The transcript ends before the object is stated, so the ellipsis marks the unfinished thought.