Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer directly, then add one or two relevant details. Use consistent past tense: change “it’s” to “it was” and “we wake up” to “we woke up.” Remove “Maybe,” which makes the memory sound uncertain, and avoid the contradictory final sentence about walking or running. You could explain what you enjoyed about riding along the beach.

例: Yes, I had a pink bike when I was about eight. During the holidays, I often rode it along the beach with my parents. We usually went early in the morning, when the beach was quiet and the weather was cooler.

提案: Give a clear opinion and support it with a specific reason or example. Avoid repetition such as “pretty…pretty” and “people, mostly people.” Use the natural phrase “can’t afford a car or motorbike” rather than “can’t really have the opportunity to buy themselves the car.” Also, replace “go like grocery shopping” with “go grocery shopping” and clarify whether you mean bicycles or motorbikes.

例: Yes, bicycles are quite popular in my country, especially in cities. Since many people can’t afford a car, they use bikes for short trips, such as commuting to work or going grocery shopping. They’re also convenient because they’re easy to park.

× Maybe it's a bike that I used to ride really often along the beach during the holidays with my parents.

✓ Maybe it was a bike that I used to ride really often along the beach during the holidays with my parents.

The sentence refers to a bike the student had during childhood, so the past-tense form was is more appropriate than the present-tense form is. Use was when describing something that belonged to or was part of a past situation.

× We wake up pretty early and so I would ride my bike along the beach.

✓ We would wake up pretty early, and so I would ride my bike along the beach.

The sentence describes a repeated routine in the past. Use would wake up to match the past habitual action would ride. When describing past routines, use would or used to consistently.

× I would say that bikes are pretty popular here because it is a pretty small country and people, mostly people, they can't really have the opportunity to buy themselves the car or a motorbike.

✓ I would say that bikes are pretty popular here because it is a pretty small country and people, mostly people, they can't really have the opportunity to buy themselves a car or a motorbike.

The speaker is referring to any car in general, not a specific car known to the listener. Use the indefinite article a rather than the definite article the before a singular countable noun when mentioning it generally for the first time.